Reviews For The Golden Coin
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Reviewer: Overlord Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/17/18 12:14 am Title: Chapter 4 : Julia

I liked the story The next victim can be a middle-aged father who is transformed into the cute little sister of his teenage daughter and her daughter knows that her younger sister was her father. and the father hates being a girl and he missed his penis a lot

Reviewer: Beefed Signed Report
Date: 02/16/18 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'm going to take it, judging by the dialogue structure, and the odd misuse of a word, that you are French, or at least not English/American/Australian in nationality. I recommend you research how to use speech marks and write dialogue in English as I believe that this is your biggest problem. There are a few words and phrases that you should also work on but you just have to know this stuff, I recommend you read more in English and look for the patterns

Reviewer: 930310 Signed Report
Date: 02/14/18 06:47 pm Title: Chapter 1

Grammar, fix it.

Author's Response: I tried to fix the first chapter.

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