Date: 03/06/18 03:59 am Title: Chapter 1
An interesting start.
One thing I really don't like is how food gets her sexually aroused - I mean, it's possible to obtain immense pleasure from something without actually getting aroused by it.
I'd also like to see Daisy get on the (straight) dating scene and try to pick up a guy - and hopefully find one.
That said, I really enjoyed it when the witch played with her mind, forcing her to say her name was Daisy - I'd like to see more of that type of thing!
It's a good story - I hope to see more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. Getting sexual gratification from food was something I was having a hard time deciding on, I put it into this chapter but I've been torn on it so I appreciate your opinion. Dating a guy is something I've been thinking about, and opens up some good story possibilities. Lastly, I initially intended for Audrey only to manipulate Daisy's mind at the beginning before sending her on her way, but I think continuing to play literal mind games with her will produce more challenges for Daisy to deal with. With work and family obligations I don't have much time anymore, but I have another chapter halfway done and should have it posted sometime between a week and a year from now. ;) Again, thanks for the feedback!
Date: 03/02/18 04:17 am Title: Chapter 3
Good on you for continuing the story! This newest chapter was well done, and I'm excited to see what all outcome up with on the next chapter(s)
Author's Response: Thank you. I start a new full time job on Monday so it might be a while until my next chapter, but I would like to actually finish a story for a change.
Date: 02/06/18 04:52 am Title: Chapter 1
I love this type of story! I will say making it longer would be nice as well (more punishments/transformation parts, small story about coping after, etc)
Overall good job! I hope you write more!
Author's Response: These chapters seemed much longer as I was writing them, probably because I'm a slow writer. After uploading I realized just how short they really are. I've already considered revising and expanding the existing material before continuing on with the story. Thanks for the feedback!
Date: 02/06/18 02:18 am Title: Chapter 2
This could be very interesting. I hope lessons are learned and she can adjust. Maybe the two of them can find a good dietary and physical fitness program. I married a larger woman. We have been together for 48 years. Things have worked pretty well, so far.
Author's Response: Audrey needs a personality makeover just as much as a physical one. Don't worry, lessons will be learned. If you've been together for 48 years and things are still going well, that's fantastic. Congratulations!
Date: 02/02/18 12:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
Instead of just actively try to lose weight she just blames the people she date for considering her to be obese. Perhaps some self-reflection is in order before you start torturing people, Audrey?
Author's Response: Yeah, someone should teach that girl a lesson! ;)