Reviews For Abnormality
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Reviewer: Trismegistus Shandy Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/21/18 10:29 am Title: Scene One

That was fun and clever. I look forward to seeing more of it.

The only problem I noticed was the dialogue formatting. You need to start a new paragraph when a new character starts talking, and if a dialogue sentence is embedded in a larger "he says" type clause, the dialogue sentence shouldn't end in a period; if it would normally end in a period, it should end in a comma in that context.

Reviewer: 930310 Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/21/18 05:30 am Title: Scene One

This story has potential. The setup is of course bizarre but I do wonder about the future of the transformed people.

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TG Storytime uses the eFiction engine and Vanilla discussions. Design by J6P.