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Reviewer: 68light68 Signed Report
Date: 01/28/18 06:13 am Title: Chapter 5

Great story, please continue x

Reviewer: Kirri Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/05/18 11:35 pm Title: Chapter 1

As Marina mentions your story is a little short but it reads well , It would have been nice to have got a little more background on Jonny and his big sister, Anything like that helps in setting up your story and makes the characters feel real, Its certainly true big time criminals tentacles spread far and wide and the chances are that Katie would become a rather more permanent fixture than was intended, With that in mind maybe a fitting end to your story would have been an epilogue set maybe 5 or so years in the future showing us what happened to the sisters ....

Again as Marina says in her review keep writing , You have the talent and i would love to see more of your stories ....

Reviewer: Marina Twelve Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/04/18 02:59 pm Title: Chapter 1

A bit short, and a bit 'simple" but well written. Take a look at my own story "The Witness" a similar theme but with lots more details and "side adventure" plots. I like the age range (11-15) for boys in this situation as they make the best "realistic" women and their voices haven't changed. I have a preference (personal) that they be disguised as older girls, so their appearance can be further camouflaged by make up.---But to each his own. Keep writing.-----

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