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Reviewer: Emilee Grace Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 01/25/20 03:21 am Title: Chapter 1 - Bad Boy

Interesting story line but reads a little choppy. Could use some editing. The ending seemed rushed but it’s refreshing to see the dominant character get taken away in handcuffs. Nice touch.

Reviewer: Golden Potato Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/01/18 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Bad Boy

Awesome story, really hyped for act 2 that's coming up. ^^

Reviewer: LittlebabyAlex Signed Report
Date: 04/20/18 08:28 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Bad Boy

I am loving this story really can't wait to read more

Reviewer: tayphud Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/17/17 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Bad Boy

This story has a lot of promise to it. Well written, and it is developing into the reader to want more!

Reviewer: Marina Twelve Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 12/16/17 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Bad Boy

The story itself is good, but reads more like a summary of events. It should be driven by dialogue and actions----Get a hold of a novel you like and copy the format and punctuation of people speaking---Try that. You should have good results because you can tell and communicate the story already. The dialogue will help you become a REAL Writer.

Reviewer: BalletBoyJamie Signed Report
Date: 12/03/17 07:30 am Title: Chapter 1 - Bad Boy

Nice! Love your stories, and this one looks quite promising. It's your multi-part ones that I like best!

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