Date: 02/19/20 08:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is a great story. Starting out as an eye-opener for stereotypical views on other people. I like how he has to repeat school to learn his lesson. At least there is the possibility he will get his old self back. That's better than a permanent change. I would love to read how Sara spends her high school years and whether she wants to change back at the end. Please, please continue.
While I consider the Paddle of Change a novel mechanism for the physical changes, I don't think it is very realistic for a female teacher to put a 6 foot tall senior boy over her lap to paddle him. In my day, the boy would have been told to stand still, bend over, and grab his ankles. Then the principal, a tall muscular guy, would swing the paddle like a baseball bat at the kid's rear. I never got 'the paddle' but I saw it happen to a couple of kids. I'm sure they felt like a baseball that had been hit by Babe Ruth. Learned their lesson well.
Date: 01/13/20 04:35 am Title: Chapter 1
This kid is a racist prick, like he deserves allt he hell that comes to him. I don't know if htis is the best way though, once he sees how Latina girls are treated in school... good luck getting that grade kid. I know this story is dead but yikes at the protagonist
Date: 10/25/17 06:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Whilst I like the concept of the story ( it certainly has many possible avenues it could follow) I did feel that we needed to know more about Jimmy's background, Who is friends are and what is family are like .... Maybe even a g/f would help , The reason I mention this is so we can cotrast the difference in Sara's new life with her earlier life as Jimmy.
, It's always nice to get to the transformation scene quickly , But i do think in this case it would have added to the story if we had witnessed Jimmy getting pointed comments for Ms Kimball