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Reviewer: 930310 Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 09/17/17 02:23 am Title: Chapter 1 - Ben's introduction and his favourite customers

Some spelling issues etc.

"we're" should be "were"

"Family's" should be "families"

Commas should be addes in several places.

There are more than these.

As for the story itself, interesting idea.

Author's Response: Spelling and grammar was never my strong suit. I even tried to run it through a online grammar check...

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