Date: 08/23/18 12:25 pm Title: Situation Normal: All Fucked Up
Yes! I've been waiting for Dauntless to come back! I love some military sci fi and this was very welcome to see today! Thanks for posting!
Author's Response: Wow, I had no idea people were actively waiting for updates! I'll be sure to set aside more time for writing.
Date: 01/18/18 10:18 pm Title: Planetfall
Fantastic so far! Really compelling read- look forward to seeing the rest.
Reminds me of Mass Effect - both in the attempt to keep the physics somewhat realistic, and the gritty realism. Would love to see the characters fleshed out a little more, but that'll probably come with the rest of the story. Well done!
Author's Response: This story will be a bit of a slow burn. But you’re right, lots of character development to come in the next several chapters. Glad you enjoy it!
Date: 12/30/17 02:48 pm Title: The Mystery Fleet
WOW! Really great stuff. I can't think of any way to improve it. Hurry up with the next chapter. You might also want to check out my Own "The Last Frontier" series--3 completed books. Different (although realistic) Science Focusing on a small band of heroes seeking vengeance against a vast space cartel. And the once male Protagonist's psychological struggle to come to terms with her change or lose her sanity.
Date: 09/20/17 12:11 am Title: Decompression
I am LOVING this story so far! I think the interplay between the characters is spot on, and sounds almost like it walked off an episode of Babylon 5 or Battlestar Galactica. I can't wait to see what unfolds!
Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback! I really wrote this to get better at character dialogue, so it's nice to know I'm getting better.
Date: 09/11/17 08:02 am Title: Dauntless
There's some nice worldbuilding and character stuff in here. I'm genuinely curious to see what you do with it.
And, since you asked for feedback, the only criticism I have is that, despite being a mysterious and threatening situation, none of the characters seem tense or worried. You would think that there would be a lot of anxiety and fear among the crew since they don't know what they're going up against and it could very well kill them all. I expect the crew of a ship to be professional, but I also expect--as an audience members--to see that they have an emotional response and are just trying to keep it in check. At least some rumors floating about, if nothing else. Or, if not, it'd be nice if there was something in the narration to acknowledge why everyone's so calm about it.
But that's pretty minor, honestly. I focused more on the bad, but I do think that the good more than outweighs it. And I definitely want to read more.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks a bunch for the in-depth response! The crew's anxiety will become more central in later chapters, it just didn't quite end up peeking out in this one- or probably the next one, either. I like the idea of a shipwide rumor or two, and I'll see if I can include it without feeling like I'm shoehorning it into what I've already got. I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far.