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Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/27/17 03:15 pm Title: A Day in the Park

Wow. They were asses.

Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/06/17 12:05 pm Title: Preparing for the day

A few small punctuation errors and the line at the end of miles phone call probably can be changed to feel more threatening and realistic. Otherwise it was pretty good.

Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/05/17 02:30 am Title: Exploration of a new area

I love this. I would love to see more.

Reviewer: ubougie Signed Report
Date: 09/03/17 11:44 am Title: The Day It All Changed

To me this is like reading the premise of a story. Not very rewarding if this is all there is, but to repeat what others have said, tack on some new chapters to this decent premise and we may just have a story here.

Reviewer: Madway Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/03/17 10:51 am Title: The Day It All Changed

It's an alright start, has minor mistakes in it and can deal with separating some lines into paragraphs, but all in all it's good.

Like storylovinggamer said, there are plenty of ways you can go about continuing the story and if you feel up to it I think you should try.

Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/03/17 01:38 am Title: The Day It All Changed

I think there should be more stories based on premises like these. Also, I think this was great besides a few minor grammar mistakes. I hope you continue this, as there is plenty of room to expand this. Does she have a boyfriend? What's her name? Who was the robotic being? How much has changed? You could go in quite a few directions with this, and there's still plenty of questions to be answered

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