Date: 11/14/18 06:08 pm Title: The Gym Class
This is hilarious as well as hot, and i find that I don't care that the viewpoint character is a complete and total idiot, or that the "realistic" tag doesn't quite fit. I've had a lot of fun with this so far, and look forward eagerly to the next chapters.
Date: 09/16/17 06:55 pm Title: The Party
You mentionned in one of the prevous chapter comments that suspension of disbelief was needed and yes, I agree with that statement, There is actually no way this could happen in real life.
But it's a story so who cares ? I like the idea.
Also, sometimes you randomly switch from 1st person to 3rd person and it is kind of confusing. And also a few typos here and there, but nothing too dramatic.
Date: 09/14/17 10:25 pm Title: Eyebrows
I'm having a lot of fun with this story. Yes, it only works if you suspend your disbelief. But that's ok.
I like how you are covering the bases of not looking in the mirror. Like falling asleep in the truck. It's convenient but it works.
Looking forward to more. As for going explicit, if it fits the story, go for it. But don't just to shoehorn it in.