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Reviewer: SomeSchlub Signed Report
Date: 10/26/17 03:14 am Title: The Change

Something I don't understand is why bother with that ending? Why not not either keep this the way they are or go into further depth about what happens next? As is, it's just a shitty ending.

Reviewer: junyour Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/14/17 10:40 am Title: The Change

Revenge served cold is still revenge and has a way of hurting both parties, I believe this story says that better, and in fewer words than many others on the site

Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/13/17 07:58 pm Title: The Change

It was a decent story. I agree with the previous reviewers review.

Reviewer: nitewatchman Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/13/17 02:19 pm Title: The Change

An interesting story - though I'm wondering why just Gary was brought before the machine. Or has John gone after the others who tormented him in high school?

Also, I wasn't quite sure why the now-female Gary seemed to regain his memories while John lost his knowledge. Seems a bit random - but it's your story to tell.

The story could easily be extended to show how Gary copes with his (or her) new life.

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