Date: 08/04/17 04:27 am Title: Chapter 1
Its a interesting story idea, but its not executed very well. The characters feel like puppets and just feel fake, they lack realism in their reactions... If you were to encounter a magic mirror that you just shoved your hand through, would you say "Hey babe, i think this is a magic mirror!" right off the bat? You'd probably say "What the hell? Is there something wrong with this? Did someone setup a prank?" ... Also, she was a bit too straightforward in the way that she told him she wanted to have sex with a woman, perhaps they could go up to bed, and then as they are preparing to sleep, she could ask him "Could i ask you something? And you'll promise not to say anything about it?"