Date: 02/19/20 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great start. i love mirror stories. Please, please continue. I don't think Liz should be evil, but that doesn't mean the mirror has to let Doug cross back to his own side after going through again. He (she) could be trapped as Liam's wife in a different world or a different time and place. Maybe Doug likes Liam more than Liz, or maybe Liz likes whoever comes through the mirror more and one of them breaks the mirror. Or it could just be an accident. Lot's of possibilities here. Good luck, and thanks.
Date: 08/04/17 04:27 am Title: Chapter 1
Its a interesting story idea, but its not executed very well. The characters feel like puppets and just feel fake, they lack realism in their reactions... If you were to encounter a magic mirror that you just shoved your hand through, would you say "Hey babe, i think this is a magic mirror!" right off the bat? You'd probably say "What the hell? Is there something wrong with this? Did someone setup a prank?" ... Also, she was a bit too straightforward in the way that she told him she wanted to have sex with a woman, perhaps they could go up to bed, and then as they are preparing to sleep, she could ask him "Could i ask you something? And you'll promise not to say anything about it?"