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Reviewer: Marina Twelve Signed starstar Report
Date: 12/15/17 01:32 am Title: Chapter 1

I sort of "get" the story, so you DO have the "imagination" to be a writer.. The next thing you need to do to improve your writing is put Dialogue in your text. Not just saying what was said or what the character was told, but actual conversation---NOT, for example "the Boy asked me for an autograph", but The boy stopped me outside of church "Can I have your autograph?" he asked.-----Get a novel off the shelf, and look how they set up and punctuate such dialogue and copy it.---Your stories will be a LOT better.

Reviewer: BalletBoyJamie Signed Report
Date: 06/15/17 11:58 am Title: Chapter 1

Loved it!! Nice to see a straight-up story from you with not too much moralizing or regrets for the characters. I love it when you write like this. Well done!

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