Date: 09/22/19 03:23 pm Title: Episode XXVII: Vandals of the Void
Another great chapter. You seem to immerse yourself into this world just as much as Aria. I guess that makes sense.
Your writing is captivating, and I can picture myself right there alongside her. Does that make me a sex Droid? Haha.
Keep up the great storytelling.
Date: 01/11/19 05:52 am Title: Episode I: Foundation
This is another story that has been a huge influence to me! I'm a huge Star Wars fan, so a TG set in the Star Wars universe is definitely intriguing, not to mention that you've also done an incredible job in not self-inserting and possibly undermining your story!
Author's Response: If I'm being honest, the whole thing is still kinda a self-insert; just into the universe, not into the plot. I'm glad to hear I've avoided the pitfalls I was worried about when writing this. It pays to remember that you can tell your own story in an established world without involving any of the main characters.
Date: 03/16/18 05:43 am Title: Episode XXII: Dune
So glad this story is continuing, it's absolutely exceptional. It's wild and wonderfully deviant; I hope there are mamy more ways the main character loses himself to his body and takes pride in the pleasurable situations presented. Looking forward to more!
Date: 11/26/17 03:09 pm Title: Episode I: Foundation
I do hope you continue this story, it's absolutely stellar and one of the best ones on this site. Especially love your descriptions of how much enjoyment the main character gets out of their situations. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: I had to deal with some persistent medical issues, but I'm finally back. Expect another page soon.
Date: 07/29/17 12:45 am Title: Episode XII: The Windup Girl
Thank you!! I know this lengthening of chapter can be more difficult. I as a reader appreciate your effort and can more "settle into" the story.
Author's Response: I'll be keeping up with the longer chapters for sure. Chapters are more fun to write when you can fit more into them.
Date: 07/28/17 04:11 pm Title: Episode II: The Color of Magic
I love the style of writing. Only minor issue and who am I to say, the change happens quickly and before I got to know the person. But the writing is very good and as I delve deeper into the story, that might not even matter
Author's Response: That's my big regret with this story, and it's something I've worked to correct in other stories. That said, I'm glad you're liking the story!
Date: 06/28/17 12:15 am Title: Episode VII: Hyperion
How about "The First Question"? By the way, it's technically "The Colour of Magic", what with being British and all.
Author's Response: Good choice! I try to use names that somewhat fit with the theme of the chapter, so I'll try to find a good place for this one.
Date: 06/20/17 04:20 pm Title: Episode IX: Book of Amber
This doesn't seem like a si-fi story... It's more magical... I'm really curious of what caused this change... Is it a virtual reality? A dream? Alternate universe?
Author's Response: Honestly, I toyed with all of those. I'm happy with what I landed on for this story, and have a few ideas floating around that involve the other ones. Watch for that in the future!
Date: 06/15/17 01:19 pm Title: Episode VIII: Stardust
I like the chapter, but I have a sneaking suspicion that we are missing a chapter. You went from Our MC arriving where she will be sold to her already being sold and somehow knowing the name of some woman she is following. There was no transition at all.
Author's Response: s***. You're right, I missed one in there. Fixing now!
Date: 06/12/17 03:16 am Title: Episode V: Contact
Definitely getting interesting. I'd like to see more background in the future, instead of all just sex, but so far it has some promise.
Author's Response: I've made another story- Knight's Watch- based on this advice. Less salacious details, more plotty goodness. Hope you enjoy!
Date: 06/11/17 09:26 pm Title: Episode I: Foundation
Interesting going so far. I give you massive plus points for proofing before you post. Maybe the unnamed girlfriend will show up later? My only significant advice is to not follow main story characters. Self insertion is the gateway to Mary Sueism. Maybe she'll see them once in a while, but write your own story in the setting.
Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice! I'm definitely looking to create a new storyline in here; I had just finished rewatching Empire before I wrote this and liked the idea of a TG set in the SW universe but not focused on a main character.