Date: 09/22/19 03:12 pm Title: Chapter 5
Hikaru, I really love the way you weave the dry humor into your story. It's so - - Thor.
Your plot and your pacing are also excellent. It's so easy to picture myself in the diner watching Nora wait on tables (I would have been too mesmerized to even speak). Even watching the Hammer fly through the walls.
Keep up the great storytelling. I love Norse mythology, even if this part wasn't in my textbooks.
Date: 05/12/19 11:56 pm Title: Chapter 4
"Lucas walked in, covering his eyes. “Please, tell me you're wearing clothes,” ... “Oh, thank God. So, how was your first day?”
Shouldn't this have been, "Oh, thank Odin?" Or "Thank Dad," or "Thank Me?"
Looking forward to seeing how a MTF TG character with lightning powers and a magic hammer handles life as a girl. Tons of stories with main characters who are all weak and helpless, not so many who are powerful and capable of venting their annoyance on mere mortals.
Author's Response: One of my favorite bits of self-indulgent comedy is to make people who should be more fantastic act like anybody else. Thus "Oh my god" when said character IS a god, and things like that.
Date: 04/24/19 04:26 am Title: Chapter 2
The punishment that Odin wanted to go for would have been grossly disproportionate, and seems like a last resort you're never coming back sort of thing. If I'm being completely honest it makes it seem like he wanted to pull some Zeus type shit and fuck his new daughter.
Date: 05/29/17 03:58 am Title: Chapter 1
As far as I know about Norse mythology several things here are inaccurate. There is no currency in Valhalla, meaning you won't need any money to buy beer/mead. Thor is married and has children. Why is there electricity?
Some minor grammatical errors.
Author's Response: You assume I was going for pure accuracy.