Date: 10/24/20 12:48 am Title: The Ninth Chapter
You would think being an Angel of Death, even on sabbatical, would come with driving privileges. Dani sure has to work hard at being a teenage girl, an angel, death, and her dead self's cousin. I think I'd want to get paid for all that, and not by the soul. Salary, plus OT, benefits, expense account; the whole 9 yards. Even on sabbatical.
Date: 10/24/20 12:28 am Title: The Eighth Chapter
Excellent beat-down by Danielle on Ginny's parents. They deserved every bit of what she was giving them. Too bad Danielle didn't get the chance to tell them that their daughter was really in Heaven, despite what they believed. Also great job on explaining the origins of the Bible and man-made sin as compared to actual God-based sin.
So what happens now that they have had contact from the afterlife? A neuralizer from "Men in Black"? Just let them go and they will think they have gone crazy? Need a clean-up in Ginny's house.
I wonder if Danielle will use her time off to explore her relationship with Kevin? She did refer to him as her boyfriend, she has probably been thinking of him in those terms to blurt it out like that.
Again, great job with the storytelling. I like your style.
Date: 10/15/20 08:35 pm Title: The Eighth Chapter
Well things just got… a little unreal? Generally I approve on consequences, and you have a lovely light style. On the other hand, this whole shared universe is a Buffy-esque nightmare. Not because the writing is bad mind you, but because horrible things happen to people for reasons that aren't their fault. Right now, I'm expecting this turn turn into a huge drama and mystery with power plays and a big showdown.
Well, at least it'll be a fun read. Thanks for sharing!
Date: 10/04/20 08:00 pm Title: The Seventh Chapter
So, Dani has a meeting with Ginny's parents. I'd like to see heaven and hell rain down on them to teach them a lesson about their own religion and that whole "Love thy Neighbor" part. Especially when that neighbor is your own flesh and blood.
Overall, I'm really enjoying this story. Your humorous writing style mixed in with the afterlife, TG, teenage angst, etc. results in a beautifully woven tale. I can't wait to read the next part. Thank you for continuing your story.
Date: 10/24/19 10:22 pm Title: The Sixth Chapter
I'm really enjoying this story. Humor is a refreshing break from some of the darker more serious stories on TGS. I especially like the way Danni's Guardian Angel swears like a sailor, taking God's name in vain, right in front of him.
Too bad Danni couldn't save Ginny. I know the grass always looks greener on the other side of the fence, but that is usually because the septic tank is overflowing. Ginny may not like what the afterlife has in store for her.
Please continue this story. It is really moving along well. Got to see what happens with Danni and Kevin. And find out about the teddy bear affect.
Date: 05/02/19 01:55 pm Title: The Sixth Chapter
YAY NOT DEAD! I'm so glad you're okay, this story is one of my favorites and I'm glad it's not dead and of course that you aren't either! THis chapter is so cute and sad at the same time. I know how you feel Ginny, I was born into a super right wing home too and it utterly sucks. I"ll probably never have the acceptance I crave fully but oh well there's always my online family to help me. Can you give Ginny a hug for me? She deserves it...
Date: 06/04/18 08:54 pm Title: The Second Chapter
As I stated before, I really like what you're doing with this. It's a ton of fun, but this chapter contains the elements that I don't like as much, and what I mean by that is that it doesn't detract from the story really at all. It's still a solid 5 for how amusing and fun it is.
What I don't like: The characters all seem to take things a little too in stride. There's absolutely no doubt in anyone's minds who Danny is, and Hadraniel's casual appearance and introduction is so unexpected that it plays out like a scene in a sitcom.
It's really very amusing, and what I've read has put a much needed smile on my face.
Date: 06/04/18 08:49 pm Title: The First Chapter
Where do I start with this? I've never read your writing, Hikki, and I have to say this story impresses me. It's too cute. I can see where it's going after one chapter, or at least I think I can. XD I love the humor involved, and the physical appearance of Danny post-change.
What I don't like as much is not contained in this chapter, but overally it really does remind me of several things I've seen and red meshed together, nicely. To be continued in chapter 2's review. XD
Date: 06/04/18 06:56 am Title: The Fourth Chapter
I re-read from the beginning to catch back up — and it’s just been plain fun. I love a good earn your happy ending, and this is going much better than some other serials about teenage soul reapers.
Also, a minor point, but thank you for keeping the el on the names. Even whiney limies.
Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: What are the other teenage soul reaper stories you speak of?
Date: 06/01/18 06:57 am Title: The Fourth Chapter
After needing to wait a year for a chapter, I had to go back and read from the beginning. It was an interesting chapter. I am curious how the story will proceed to balance the High school and Job aspects.
Author's Response: It hasn't been a damn year... :(
Date: 06/01/18 02:48 am Title: The Fourth Chapter
OH SNAP HELL MALL! I wonder, anyway wow this was kinda a powerful chapter. No matter what he did he was going to hell, that's harsh but then again maybe hell isn't that bad? I don't know, anyway thank you for another chapter. I absolutely love this story and i cant wait to see more of our cute bear eared reaper!
Date: 06/14/17 09:17 pm Title: The Third Chapter
It's quite the interesting story, Hikaro. Looking forward to seeing what you do next.
Quick question: Got any plans for the guy that originally killed the poor kid? Would be interesting to see...
Author's Response: He's on his way to Hell as soon as the line atarts moving again.
Date: 06/04/17 10:09 pm Title: The Third Chapter
Brandy, huh? I wonder what kind of sound she'd make with that scythe-bear going through her and taking her immortal soul to stand in line for eternity in limbo?
Author's Response: Do you have experience with c**** like Brandy that killing her would be cathartic for you?
Date: 05/26/17 08:51 pm Title: The Second Chapter
Oh there are words in a logical sense here. And some that aren't, but that's beside the point. And legible! I had thought you scrawled this on a bloody piece of paper but I can see you actually typed it up at some point. Yay! So about the next chapter...
Author's Response: The next chapter is written on the wall of room 23 at the Dorchester hotel, completely in blood. New wallpaper is covering it.
Date: 05/25/17 03:58 am Title: The First Chapter
I really want to see the images involved. That outfit sounds freaking adorable, I want to see it!
Author's Response: The outfit was my idea, actually. One of the images was NSFW, so I'm not showing it here. An image I found that KINDA looks right may pop up, though.
Date: 05/22/17 10:52 pm Title: The First Chapter
Oh, look at that. Somebody doing the obvious and telling the truth at the first opportunity. Given how inefficient the afterlife bureaucracy has been up to this point, I'd be surprised if they even had protocol to prevent this.
I also notice a few hints towards plot details that are probably going to be explored in-depth later on. Good job incorporating that; it's actually pretty subtle on a first read.