Date: 06/29/19 12:36 am Title: Chapter 1
Finally got around to reading this. Really enjoying it. Hope you continue to update though judging by some of the author notes and reviews I'm guessing updates tend to be sporadic. That and its been a little over six months from the last update.
Date: 12/20/18 09:01 pm Title: Chapter 12
Loved it! Is rose a god as well (i vaguely remember some kind of demonic ritual and then a arena fight to get him where "she" is now)? I might have to go back and read through this, the gaps are just too long in-between chapters.
Date: 11/22/17 12:49 pm Title: Chapter 2
I'm enjoying it so far. Two things though. It's entirely unclear what the ritual was, how it was supposed to give him immortal life or why the necromancer wasn't expecting his soul 'so soon' apparently forty years later. The other thing is the stretch of time and then Jump to present day isn't very clear - forty years has passed and readers should feel/understand that somehow I feel. This is kind of a tag-on to the first but also it's own thing - you should decide what your laws of Magic are and explain them to readers, with this you could explain the ritual, and what cutting out the middle man in a spell means exactly. Is magic so flexible you can just do that?
Not sure if any of this is resolved in later chapters, but if not it's some things to think about.
Obligatory five stars because the grammar and syntax doesn't make me want to guzzle bleach.
Author's Response: Appreciate the feedback! Never fear, explanations are on their way! The immortality is explained in one of the next two chapters, the ritual is already written but might not show up for quite a few chapters, and the rules for magic will become clearer soon enough. I have taken note of your thoughts the time jump. Cheers!
Date: 11/03/17 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 8
OMG SILVER PUPPY! That's so cute, I want to see what this creature can do. I cant wait till the next chapter! And ROFG assassin after assassin. Wow... he should have just listened to her. Jeez people if it doesn't work the first time, don't assume it will the sixth.
Date: 10/10/17 06:50 am Title: Chapter 7
For the most part I am enjoying this story. I hate to see that it not get updated soon. I like the story, the only ‘complaint’ I have is some things go by too quickly. More detail in some parts would be more immersive. Having said that, it’s not such a bad thing