Date: 03/26/17 03:25 am Title: 4 - Meeting the new parents
A very interesting story, which has piqued my interest! Please, can we have more and more!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review mate! People giving me feedback helps me maintain motivation to keep going on these types of stories :D Tell me what you would like to see also I'm open to suggestions :3
Date: 03/20/17 10:40 am Title: 2 - Hospitals and recovery
That's not how things work. He did not give permission for this operation and he can't be held reliable for the things he didn’t cause. Furthermore, the brain is that of an adult man and since life is determined by whether the brain is working or not the identity should as well. The getting a period thing is impossible because the brain needs to be involved in the release of FSH and LH, which requires stimulation that this brain did not receive.
The grammar is in need of editing.
Author's Response: Yeah He didn't that I will agree with. What I've tried to describe is a world where this surgery is in it's early stages where as I think I said "selfish people" get it done which badly effects the rights of the people who do have it done. This means that the law surrounding it has been designed so the persons body is held in priority to the brain. I think you could draw parallels to woman's and trans rights in our current society but I wouldn't put that much thought into it ;) Also I wouldn't pretend to know how the brain works in terms of the release of FSH and LH is... I'm no brain scientist. For the ease of reading for people like me who are not neuroscientists I've just simplified it to he's a young girl now. Also my grammar is a common complaint I know it's my biggest weakness at the moment :/ Thank you for commenting though! I do appreciate feedback.
Date: 03/20/17 10:33 am Title: 1 - Car accidents and discovery
The grammar in this chapter is really in need of improvement. While it is written as a diary entry it is still annoying when words are misspelled as often as they are.
The plot and the story are however interesting but hardly feasible in real life considering how likely it is that the brain would be rejected.
Author's Response: Yeah I know about the grammar :/ When I have the time I'm planning on grammar and spell checking all my stories or at least the two most popular ones soon. As for your second point I also know hahaha As the girls skull wouldn't have grown properly for a mans brain to fit and as you said the hormones and also other wiring's wouldn't be present. Although the fact his brain is put into a different body is integral to the story itself I would say that the believably or feasibility are not particularly relevant. I agree it's not believable but I haven't written anything on this account that I want to be taken seriously. Thank you for your feedback though! Much appreciated :D
Date: 03/16/17 11:32 pm Title: 4 - Meeting the new parents
lol think i like John. he seems pretty funny. but thinking about all she's been through so far, what a mind trip. hoping things get easier on her
Author's Response: Yeah he's a bit of a interesting fellow... :P
Date: 03/11/17 06:32 pm Title: 3 - Contracts and crying
must be so scary for him(her). hope things workout in Australia
Author's Response: Yeah it is. She/he was coping by ignoring it which was possible in the hospital but in the real world it kinda hit hard. Lucky Charles is a legend :P
Date: 03/11/17 12:55 am Title: 2 - Hospitals and recovery
So going to school is the biggest shock here :o lmao.
Well, he's pretty young, should still remember some of the curriculum.
Author's Response: Well he's been out of school for somewhere about 2-3 years so it was kinda shocking to be told he has to go back. You'll find out more in the next chapter :D Thanks for the review!