Date: 03/26/17 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 1 The start
Your story is more or less well written (minus some small hiccups on occasion), but I have difficulty sympathizing with the main character. In the end I guess that doesn't really matter, because this strikes me as the kind of story which focuses more on causing mayhem and changes as opposed to strong characterization, so the Main Character just serving as a catalyst to the Gender Bending shenanigans works okay.
I have a sneaking suspicion that Rick will be the last one changed by Lucy.
Date: 03/07/17 09:47 pm Title: Chapter 1 The start
Okay kid you know what happened, stop acting stupid. You know what you did, you can stop it maybe. You need to tell your friend "Lucy" (coughlucifercough) to undo what you did. Because what you are doing is WRONG! If you keep this up, you're just a pathetic self righteous "nice guy" that deserves whatever hell happens to you.
Date: 03/07/17 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 1 The start
You could really have tried proofreading this story because it is full of errors and very hard to follow.
Author's Response: @930310, I'm sorry for the bad read. Honestly, I just wanted to put the story out there as fast as possible to get started. I proofread it a couple of times, but plan to do it some more before posted the next chapter. Thanks for your feedback.