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Reviewer: Krv1987 Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 02/02/17 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 1 Busted.

I like the story it just needs some more filling out the a backstory like why did he put the bra on in the first place and give a better idea of where they are at because I'm guessing they are in a B&B so who are the guests that are staying there. So all in all good start just a little more work.

Author's Response: Thanks its a rough draft, I posted that in the story notes, but for some reason it didnt take. There's also a small section, totally missing. Expect an update within 24 hours.

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