Date: 03/20/18 04:25 am Title: Kneeling (but not me)
Must admit i think this one was a bit needlessly drawn out though, felt like a lot of repetition of near indentical events but the story is great it its essence.
Author's Response: The Vegas part, for me, was long. Then again, some readers loved it. Thanks for sharing!
Date: 12/10/17 07:11 pm Title: Kneeling (but not me)
That was... a great read. Both books had so much growth for Brandi, with 1 being the set up and 2 being her real growth.
Also great to see Tiffany get hers in the end.
Author's Response: You can read more about Tiffany in Hazed. Glad you liked it!
Date: 09/25/17 05:23 pm Title: End of Book
Oh No!! The End as in "that's all folks?" I loved your inserted pics....keep them coming! They were all fabulous. Brandi has much more ahead...and I am dying to see where Tiff may add to that, o if Al somehow returns. LOVED this story.
Author's Response: Are you reading A High Note? It's full of pics.
Date: 08/05/17 01:08 pm Title: Second to 24, Part I
Absolutely stunning, genuinely the best thing I've read in adult literature. This has given me a fair few new fantasies that will be sticking around for a while!!
Author's Response: That is so sweet! I hope you're enjoying my others as well!
Date: 08/03/17 05:29 am Title: My Mentor
Loved the vacation and I see Brandi's existence is centered around Tiffany. Like her every thought. I like that. I'm so hoping it doesn't turn 'normal' and she dates Brock but we will see. Still I want more. Now that's the sing of a great story.
Date: 08/02/17 03:35 pm Title: The New Pal
So the story has gotten a little... slow. (For lack of a better word). It's nice that the important people are all so accepting. This part of the story is all nice nice and has no edge. However, having said that, thevampountbof writing and chapters and length of story there is, this is not a problem st all. Infarction, it's kind of a nice change. Though I do miss the sluttier Brandi
Date: 08/02/17 05:28 am Title: The Goodbye
Brandi is sad, I'm sad, al's sad, we are all sad. Though I am glad the romance is over, but... NBA know to reality. What will happen when Brandi goes home? Also, I know my comments don't mean much because the story was finished a while ago, but sometimes it's fun posting my feelings on the story.
Date: 08/02/17 05:12 am Title: The Love Affair
Wow. The whole Tiffany thing went in a completely different direction then I ever imagined. I'm a fan of how she (conciously or not) subtly manipulated brook/Brandi. I don't think I'll be a fan of the romance, for this story anyway. However I do like the fact Brandi seems to get attached really easily. Now I wonder without Tiffany , how will she get the implants removed? And did the parents see his passport?
Date: 08/01/17 03:49 pm Title: Confessions
So far there is nothing I don't like. You keep edging the story, pushing just slightly farther as Brandi sinks just a little deeper. The best (and worst) is that it's moving so slowly. It's what makes it so erotic and well written
Date: 08/01/17 04:33 am Title: Sex Ed
Pictures are ok. I really liked the one that inspired you. Pictures give us a better idea of what you are creating with your words. The bad part about pictures is when a reader reads a good story, they form images in their mind, so seeing s picture kind of brings that to a screeching halt. However, having said that, the pictures you used are not overwhelming but more subtle which adds more to the story for me anyway. Not sure that made sense.
Date: 08/01/17 03:20 am Title: The Strand
So far the story is building nicely. Giving the reader a very descriptive view of the timeline and area and the people in it. Events fly by like memories. Just the right pace, nothing is dragged out but at the same time you get the sense you were there and experienced it all. Very nicely done
Date: 08/01/17 03:11 am Title: Second to 24, Part I
Ahh the feeling of starting a new story.... an epic one at that. First chapters are like, wait did I miss something??? But as you read further in you forget all that and become part of the story. It's chapter is very short and I'm not sure what's going on, but I'll give it a 5 for the anticipation!
Date: 05/01/17 04:00 pm Title: Kneeling (but not me)
Resistance as in the naysayers. The family and friends were all like; you(Mc) look gorgeous and kept encouraging without anyone saying otherwise. Though even I would the Mc looked hot the way she is described; but, there should be some who felt it was wrong. Still a great read
Author's Response: Oh, I get it. On the one hand, I did make quick mention of some lost friends and disapproving neighbors. But, on the other, that's the fantasy world I usually write about. I don't deal with the struggle of acceptance, it's just not my thing. In that regard, I keep it light, just as I only write about boys who need little physical help to become girls. It's fiction and I want it to be fun.
Date: 04/29/17 02:44 am Title: Second to 24, Part I
I loved this one! The days without a new chapter were awful, especially after we found out Tiffany tricked Brandi the whole time :(
Author's Response: It was fun to write, knowing I was building up to that surprise. Desire Oasis (coming soon) is the same way.
Date: 04/29/17 01:43 am Title: Second to 24, Part I
Thanks! I'll delete the other one.
Author's Response: sorry again! Most of my characters end up with men but there have been a few. You might like Getting the Bartender's Attention (she becomes bi) and upcoming Desire Oasis has a character who likes... well, it's complicated but that might be your cup of tea.
Date: 04/27/17 12:17 pm Title: Kneeling (but not me)
Created an account just to say thanks for the story. Loved the story but I always felt that the people around Mc(main character) were the ones pushing Mc to be what she is now. Happy or not there was not such drama or resistance. Anyways a happy ending and a Happy plot is also nice.
Author's Response: I didn't really think about that. If you tell me more about what sort of resistance you'd like to see, maybe I'll try that in another story.
Date: 04/26/17 07:44 pm Title: Kneeling (but not me)
Wow! A roller-coaster of a story. Thank you for another awesome story, though sad to say goodbye to this one. *applauds*
Author's Response: All good things... More good things coming. Desire Oasis, my first long SciFi, should be ready to start posting in a week or so.
Date: 04/26/17 12:02 pm Title: Second to 24, Part I
Another tour de force and quite a marathon, Chloe. Your stories are all terrific, you have an easy but literate style and a great eye for important details. I wonder if Brandi will one day go for SRS despite Mike's stated preferences. Anyway, I look forward to your next effort, although I'll readily understand if you need a breather after such a long piece of work. Thank you.
Author's Response: What a sweet and thoughtful review! I won't keep you waiting long. I have a short story ready to go and I'm about half-way through a first edit of my next epic (this one's SciFi). As to Brandi, you'll see her again in An Artful Change. Mike's pretty content with her as is but the men in my next story don't stop part-way.
Date: 04/24/17 07:54 pm Title: Kneeling (but not me)
Well done, Chloe! Thanks for the story and the incredible pictures.
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it and a really liked hearing from you along the way.
Date: 04/20/17 08:01 pm Title: Holiday Gifts
I had the funny feeling, that this was where it was going, only I assumed that Tiffany would be setting this up. But I always remembered hat line of Mike's about Brianna :If I were into that kind of thing. So, yes, nice on Chloe!
Author's Response: It's been a long time coming for our new girl. I do love it when it all comes together. Just a few more loose ends...
Date: 04/20/17 05:15 am Title: Not a Homewrecker
OMG this story was so good , and now i want to read your other stories as well.
Much love from kittykat
Author's Response: I can't wait to hear if you like them, too! There's a fun ending just around the corner here.
Date: 04/18/17 12:56 pm Title: Date with My Ex-Gigilo
That must be so frustrating for Brandi. It is a shame she cannot really enjoy being with another girl, not even in a threesome. When are the withdrawal symptoms going to set in? And how will she cope with them?
Author's Response: I knew you'd think that! :) Sorry, I'm working on others where the character appreciates women! Oh, I hate to be a tease but you'll see Brandi enjoy a threesome in An Artful Change (a story I'll be posting later).
Date: 04/18/17 08:39 am Title: Girlfriends: Take Two
All in all its been good thus far, her BJ quest also seems a little out of character for having the "normal girl" convo to still go around like she has been although it has been funny go see her strung along to some guy instead of vice versa. Either way, I look forward to your daily updates of your stories, a fun way to start the day
Author's Response: Hmm... maybe I needed to set that up better. Thanks.
Date: 04/17/17 11:39 pm Title: Girlfriends: Take Two
I really liked the story to begin with, but it got way to sluty and repetitive towards the end. Keep up the writing as your stuff is great in general.
Author's Response: I think I'll do a better job describing them up front. This one (and the next long one I'll publish) had way more sex than normal (for me). The repetition is over for All In. Thanks,
Date: 04/17/17 02:46 pm Title: Girlfriends: Take Two
Gotta ask, what happened? Feels like the plot went entily another way and the whole storywent into left field. After everything her hang up is suckin this guys cock? Kinda makes sense but not really just makes hrr seem shallow.
Author's Response: Well, that was the intent. It's a departure from the linear storyline. On the one hand, I was "buying time" to simply let some time pass without just saying "six months, and after some dating with men..." On the other hand, I had readers ask for more clothing. I also thought this silly BJ quest had a touch of humor to it that people might like. But, yes, it was out of left field and that's the sort of feedback I'm hoping to hear. Thanks. The input's helpful.
Date: 04/15/17 08:11 pm Title: To Hell with Signals, Time for Radical Measures
You're really into sexy clothes, aren't you, Chloe? That red ensemble is HOT, HOT, HOT!
Author's Response: So hot, I agree! I had some feedback on earlier stories that readers wanted more about clothes so I came up with this (silly) idea that my character would dress in a certain way to appeal to her dates. There's a few scenes coming up that I think are your cup of tea (well, close).
Date: 04/11/17 10:05 am Title: My Mentor
O my, but this entire story was absolutely shocking! Creative, original; over-the-top but not ridiculous, with just enough of a real life story feeling. "A" work for sure.
Author's Response: So glad you like it! I hope you find the next phase fun.
Date: 04/09/17 11:11 pm Title: Methodical, Patient, and Cruel
Honestly did not see this coming. Well orchestrated twist. I actually had been feeling bad for Tiffany. I hope his revenge is to continue being Brandi and enjoy every minute of it; and to really appreciate Tiff for showing him what a waste of time it was to have sex with a woman.
Author's Response: That's great. Sounds like I got it about right for you.
Date: 04/08/17 10:16 am Title: No Sleep
To ne perfectly honest, Chloe, The only people I have ever met who were as sex crazed as that were gay men. So I assume CD/TG persons could ne like that. I have met many whores in my youth. Growing up near the Reeperbahn in Hamburg dies that to You. None of them was sex crazed, for them it's strictly a job.
So then women: I cannot say I have met any, who would do something like that more than once, and the only one I met who ever experienced that was raped.
Conclusion? This is a fantasy I personally would not recommend putting onto practice, especially not with promiscuous men who frequent "real" whores.
Author's Response: Oh, so true! In part, there's a reason for the way Brandi has been acting. But, regardless, this is fantasy fiction and I'm wondering if people like reading about a weekend like the one she's having. It was intended to be over the top but maybe that's fun for readers (or simply too much)? I couldn't agree more with your comparison to reality. As a general rule, all of my characters are promiscuous and most are incredibly so (and thus not realistic in that regard).
Date: 04/07/17 11:35 pm Title: No Sleep
I hope Brandi gets caught whoring around by Tiff's parents at some point. Would be a little funny to me. Also, that awkward moment when you feminize a girls brother an traun them to be a whore cause reasons an he/she responds by sleeping with your parents and everyone they know almost...
Date: 04/05/17 02:59 pm Title: Best Week Ever
I could write a review saying how great I think this story is, but not right now...I want to keep reading. Maybe later.
Author's Response: It's going to take a few twists, sort of detours. Brandi will get to the end of her path but not for a bit. Feel free to share along the way. I'll re-write this at some point so I can factor in what I hear from readers. And thanks for reading along!
Date: 04/05/17 01:31 pm Title: The New Pal
Continues to tease. I think there will be an operation in the future. Tiffany's parents (father) should pay for it. There could be a very ironic developments there.
Author's Response: I can promise irony, to be sure. My stories seldom have full sex changes (don't want you to get your hopes up).
Date: 04/04/17 03:38 pm Title: The Old Pals
I hope I'm not wrong about this, but seems there's a nice nod to another of your stories in this last chapter? A certain story called "The Lock Out"? Which I thoroughly enjoyed as well =D. Another great chapter =D
Author's Response: Good for you! Yes, every one of my stories ties to others. All In refers to four other stories. Maybe you'll see the others as well (though one isn't yet published)? Glad you're enjoying it!
Date: 04/02/17 02:15 pm Title: MILF
Interesting. Does she go all the way? She does deserve some breaks. Tiffany's family should pay for the Op if there ever is one. How are things with Brandi's family?
Author's Response: She'll have a few more little struggles but, yes, she'll get a break. I think you'll be happy for her.
Date: 03/27/17 08:57 am Title: My First Time – Ready to be Shared
well finally back computer broke on me :( reading last 2 updates made me so mad i about hit my new computer. how could somebody be so cruel :( just glad his sister wont see any of this.
Author's Response: I actually worried that the low point bothered you so much that you stopped reading! Glad you're back.
Date: 03/23/17 02:20 am Title: My First Time – Ready to be Shared
That was definitely a shock. After all the cutesy stuff between Brandi and Tiffany I figured they were both head over heals for each other and were going to go pure smut with a bunch of sex and live happily ever after. It sucks that Tiffany was a lying bitch the whole time but that punch in the gut was amazing, especially when we knew nothing at all besides her going a little overboard on stuff and having it all come crashing down after Brandi got back from the vacation. I hope you can get back to All In soon. Definitely the best story you've written yet
Date: 03/22/17 10:48 pm Title: My First Time – Ready to be Shared
I have enjoyed the story so far, but honestly I saw it coming, the only question was when. the main giveaway, was the story header "motivation for change: revenge, tricked", none of the story fit that description, so I started questioning Tiffany's motives at every step. I have suspected for a while that she was up to no good!. maybe I paid too much attention to the story header and ruined it for myself lol. top twist anyways!
Date: 03/22/17 05:16 pm Title: Second to 24, Part I
Thanks Chloe for this excellent story. Please remember that in Disney stories, real villains never go unpunished. And some of us certainly want a severe and public punishment for Tiffany ;)
Author's Response: Well, was that Disney enough?
Date: 03/22/17 01:44 pm Title: My First Time – Ready to be Shared
My reaction was that we were sucker punched. We were reading the story because we thought it would have a specific arc, and we were happily following along with the expected story line. But then the reveal came, and it was as if you lured us in with the promise of honey and then punished us with vinegar.
I'm not saying that this is wrong or bad. Pulling the unexpected is an effective story-telling tool. I'm just relating my reaction to it. “Hey! I was promised a cake!”
I thought that the reveal went on a little long. It felt like you were rubbing salt in the wound. It wasn't necessary to replay every scene from Tiffany’s POV. Instead, it would have expected to read more about Brandi’s reaction, and then stop.
On the other hand, I really have no idea what to expect next. You promised a Disney ending, but I’m feeling “once bitten.”
Good work! I wish you the best with this.
Author's Response: That's really helpful. I was certainly looking to shock you and it sounds like I did. I promise you'll like the rest of it - no more biting! Oh, and as to the long reveal, you're right. I'm thinking some people will like that but we'll see. It did go longer than was needed but, maybe, some readers enjoyed it.
Date: 03/22/17 01:22 pm Title: My First Time – Ready to be Shared
That's devious, Chloe ;) But honestly, what you expected to achieve has certainly happened with me. As I have my own sweet (if sometimes dramatic) love story to tell, I'd be ready to go on, but I see your point, love.
Great story so far. I wonder why Disney doesn't do one or the other of your stories?
Author's Response: Thanks. Glad I got it right for you.
Date: 03/22/17 02:49 am Title: Methodical, Patient, and Cruel
That name drop was awesome! I hope the two stories can connect and see Brandi and Sonja meet up or something :)
Author's Response: It's always fun for me to tie stories together. If you haven't noticed, every one of my stories is tied to at least one other. This one's tied to three.
Date: 03/21/17 01:01 pm Title: Methodical, Patient, and Cruel
The chapter title says it all, doesn't it? I knew women can be bitches, I have been bitchy myself sometimes, but this cruelty ... I hope you never encountered someone like that in real life?
Author's Response: Tiffany's extreme. I hope nobody's ever seen a real-life version!