Reviews For Evelyn
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Reviewer: miara Signed Report
Date: 02/26/17 02:38 pm Title: Life turned upside down

I didn't read beyond "I personally disagree.". It's the same like you are saying "I think 2 + 2 equals 5, and I personally disagree that everyone else in the universe is wrong". Sometimes, and a lot of times in life, there are lots of shades, but in logic, there is just wrong and true, and this is a logic case and you are so wrong it's a 100% case, and saying "I personally disagree" is so ridiculous and makes anything, you would say after not worth reading.

Ok I did a mistake, I also read the setence after that "One thing to note is that I've never had any actual lessons in this.". So it's even worth. You're saying "I think 2+2 equals 5, I think I am right, I didn't go to school.". Unbelievable. Look at the link I provided you, you will notice it's ending is "edu", meaning it's from a educational institute like a school or university. Maybe it will teach you something, you didn't learn in school.

Don't take me personal, I am not meaning to speak in an offending way. It's just I am sick of all those stories, which are just horrible written and don't follow basic writing rules.

But why I wrote you that review actually was as a friendly hint, because you are talented and your plots are good. But you are ruining them.

Stories arent written in present tense. Stories arent written out of 1st person narrators, The End.

Author's Response: Alright. I'll respect your opinion, but I'm going to stick with what I'm doing now. If you think I am ruining my stories by writing like this then I am sorry, but I am perfectly happy with it myself and from the reviews I've gotten, most of everyone else seems to be as well. Changing everything around at this stage would be a massive pain anyway. I do have another story in very early planning stages that WILL most likely be written in 3rd person past tense, so maybe that'll be something you'll like more. It'll likely be a long while before any of that gets posted though.

Reviewer: miara Signed starstar Report
Date: 02/25/17 10:52 pm Title: Life turned upside down

As much as I like your plots, it is such a killer that they are written in present tense... stories arent written in present tenses. Scripts are, dreams are, but not novels. You should maybe read about this and read a how to write a novel/book properly. Or just open any book in a/your bookshelf, youll notice theyre all written in past tense. Also it is really uncommon, that novels are written out of the I narrator. That's actually mostly forbidden. Read more about and learn maybe from this: But you can just google about it, youll find tons of educational sites which will tell you the same. Normally you should have learned in high school about these rules of "basic writing" though.

Author's Response: While I understand your reasoning, I personally disagree. One thing to note is that I've never had any actual lessons in this. Maybe that's one of the many mistakes in the teaching system here, but that's neither here not there. At least not to this degree. I have written other, shorter stories before that are not on this website where I've played around with a lot of different ways to write. When I first started 'Fitting into a new Role' it was the first time I tried 1st person in present tense. I know it's not seen much, but I don't really see the reason it's so wrong. There are pro's and con's to different ways of writing. In my case I really started to like this style because it allows me to delve much deeper into the thoughts and emotions of the character. I've tried doing the same in 3rd person past tense, but that just felt wrong. It didn't flow right. You also don't actually give any strong reason WHY it is "forbidden" to write this way. You mostly just say where it should and shouldn't be used, but not the reason why. I personally don't really like following such rules just because someone says so without knowing the reason why. And no, the link you send isn't very forthcoming for me either. Also, I'm writing as a hobby, not as a professional. I write for fun and have mostly written by following my feelings which has gone much better then when I try following strict rules instead. I don't see one style as strictly better then another. They're all good and bad in different ways. My apologies if this reaction came over a bit strongly, but your post came over a bit degrading and I felt I needed to express my opinion on the subject to you.

Reviewer: Sanro Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/11/17 12:00 am Title: First contact

Wow Dakota and Harry joins this is lovely 😻😘

Author's Response: I've been looking forward to reaching this point as well. Good to see I'm not the only one :P

Reviewer: Casey Thompson Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/10/17 08:07 am Title: First contact

I can't tell you how much I'm enjoying this. I think you're doing an excellent job of telling the story from Evelyn's viewpoint. Having written the character of Evelyn originally, I just can't wait to read each chapter and see how Evelyn herself thought. Love, love, love it!!!!!

Author's Response: Hearing such praise from the author of the original story makes me feel all giddy inside! I think I'm enjoying writing this just as much as you seem to have with reading it.

Reviewer: Taarpa Signed Report
Date: 01/09/17 04:57 pm Title: First contact

Oh, oh Wow! Your doing a nice job here Nathriel! Looking forward to more of Evelyn's perspective! Loving Hugs Talia

Ps. Hi Casey!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad it's to your liking! Sadly, Talia is still lost in time but... *tries to hug Talia across space and time*

Reviewer: Taarpa Signed Report
Date: 01/06/17 07:09 pm Title: Further exploration

Nice start so far Nathriel. Evelyn's in for quite the surprise. Loving Hugs Talia

Author's Response: Haha, yes. Evelyn won't know what hit her!

Reviewer: Taarpa Signed Report
Date: 01/06/17 05:53 pm Title: Life turned upside down

Hi Nathriel! Nice to see you back at it! (Writing that is). So you were Evelyn, I was Talia in Coping! lol. Looking forward to reading Evelyn's perspective, having previously read "Dakota" this should be interesting! Loving Hugs Talia

Author's Response: Yea, the mood to write just keeps flunctiating all the time for me it seems. As does having time for it in the first place. And yea! I remember you being Talia! I had to reread that bit of Coping again to remember Talia's personality and all that though because it's been a while. I hope I can keep your interest!

Reviewer: Casey Thompson Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/06/17 08:31 am Title: Further exploration

Lovely, just lovely.

Author's Response: I'm glad to hear so!

Reviewer: Sanro Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/05/17 06:21 pm Title: Further exploration

I am a fan of Casey for writing these stories.i have loved Amanda and Dakota both as a character and this relates to them and definitely going to read it more thanks 😻😘

Author's Response: Thank you! I've really like Casey's trilogy, so to speak, a lot myself. But that's probably quite clear with me writing this spin-off in the first place. As you've noticed though, Evelyn has a little of a different personality as opposed to Dakota and my approach to writing this is different as well, but I hope I'm able to keep your interest all the same.

Reviewer: Casey Thompson Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/22/16 09:11 am Title: Life turned upside down

Excellent! When you approached me with your idea of Ev's point of view, I was intrigued and excited. What makes this special is that had I written it, it would have been different. Having someone else bring in other elements is fascinating. I love the beginning, and can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Haha, indeed. I'm quite enjoying it as well for those same reasons. The way Evelyn reacts to the change is a lot different from Amanda and Dakota.One of the reasons I wanted to write this in the first place is that I could bring some more diversity to the whole thing.Glad to hear you're enjoying it so far! I hope I'll be able to keep that up for the rest of the story!

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