Reviews For Nanomist
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Reviewer: magisterb Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/20/16 09:31 pm Title: Someone else, something else. Or vice-versa?

Your story was very sexy and original, however you need to work on your grammar.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I know, I am working on it. :)

Reviewer: Ktech Signed Report
Date: 12/20/16 12:04 am Title: Ironheart Industries

Nice, but just so you know, a flash drive isn't a computer. It's just storage

Author's Response: Yes, I am well aware. What i adressed as the computer were nanites, not the flash drive

Reviewer: I_Think Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/19/16 08:28 pm Title: Ironheart Industries

I think that you could use an editor/proofreader to check over your translation; most of it is quite readable but there are some weird words here and there, which could be fixed fairly easily.

The story itself is a little simplistic and sounds like a wish-fulfillment fantasy, honestly. However, I think you are pretty good at describing scenes and have a good sense of pacing!

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm happy you enjoyed it. My writing skills are still a work in progress as well as my english. I hope I'll get there soon.

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