Date: 06/17/12 09:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
cute story, guess Kelly(ie) got what (s)he dreamed of. I'm glad you had fun writing this first draft 'Caught with consequences' is the basis of most sit-coms. Please spend some time proofreading prior to posting; spell check can't tell the difference between then and than, can't tell when a sentence says the exact opposite of what you intended, and has no idea of when one character speaks and then another. That's up to you to do. Keep in mind that some of your characters are very young, and as such the vocabulary and speaking pattern should reflect that.