Date: 03/25/18 04:48 pm Title: The Deep Part 3
............. I love the story but why is Prim such a fool? It doesnt take a genius to realize leaking water is a bad thing. Her.. foolishness, in not waking Luna up may have killed the water fairy kingdom. She keeps making these incredibly irrational and rather idiotic choices that just male no sense. It seems like quite the stretch that sge wouldnt be smart enough to have realized something was very very very wrong when the water first started leaking. Its as if any common sense was purposefully removed
Date: 03/23/18 03:38 am Title: The Reunion
Sadly once again Maria proves to be a null character. So much for Prim being her mother, Maria had to search her out. With how bad a mother Prim is I honestly dont see why Maria is even in the story. Its not a good idea to introduce a character as important as Maria should be unless they are actually important. Sure we are told that maria is why Prim would stay but we have yet to be shown that fact.
Date: 01/29/18 05:14 pm Title: The Unforgettable
Well didn't see this chapter coming out so fast. Mr. Your work is good. Happy that prim is back how she is. Now my question is going to be what is going to happen when his...Well now her ex friends show up at his place missing? Only time can tell and now mother and daughter is back together and same with prim and Luna....😁
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 01/29/18 03:31 pm Title: The Unforgettable
Thanks, Therms, I would have been really sad if she hadn't returned and saved her love.
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 01/27/18 07:48 pm Title: The Camping trip
This story is very nice, though I think that Prim should have more character, her emotions should be described more. Also I wanted to ask why Maria is called Mare in the 23rd+ chapter.
Also whaaaaaaat, this ending is not good. I really hope that he will turn back.
Author's Response: The simple answer is 'Oops'. I got her name mixed up and thought it had always been Mare.
Date: 01/26/18 08:16 am Title: The End Part 4
I sure hope you are, Therms! I'd never forgive you if she had to stay human! *laughs*
Date: 01/18/18 09:16 pm Title: The End Part 3
Another cliff hanger? Your getting as bad as Bronwen. Anyway lovely story; Therms. Five flapjacks for you *giggles*
Author's Response: What? Somebody is worse than me? I can't allow that. Now I'll need to come with the ultimate cliff-hanger for next time.
Date: 01/12/18 03:25 pm Title: The Camping trip
As a side note, im really curious to see if this ancient curse will be later explained in the story as a Integral part of the ending, and I'd love to see more information on the darkness queen.
Author's Response: I'll make a note to do an explanation on it near the end.
Date: 01/12/18 03:23 pm Title: The End Part 2
Love it! Magical stories are my favorite. I find it so interesting that an ancient magic is superior to that of the fairy queens. That leaves the question, where did that magic come from? Someone higher in the chain of magic? A god? The creator of faries and the great spirits? I can't wait for more!!
Author's Response: I think I'll need to work on a lore book when I'm done with this one. There is a lot of exposition that just doesn't smoothly fit into the story.
Date: 01/12/18 10:47 am Title: The End Part 2
Oh dear, cliff hanger! I hope you don't keep us dangling as long as before. Please? Pretty please?
Date: 01/03/18 07:49 pm Title: The End Part 1
Lovely story, Therms.
Date: 10/15/17 12:26 am Title: The Spirits
This is so intense... so many things going wrong. How can they possibly hope to defeat Deleka, she's just too powerful. And poor Peter getting turned into a faerie unwillingly... that seems rather rotten. Is there no laws against that? What's to keep faeries from brainwashing droves of humans to turn them into faeries? How utterly terrifying...
Date: 05/17/17 06:51 am Title: The Camping trip
Well done, MA, your editing is improving. Lovely story, I am still hooked.
Date: 05/10/17 05:48 am Title: The Rise
Hi MA, as much as I enjoy the Story I have to point out, that there are at least three instances of sentences, that got words in them, that don't make sense in this last chapter. The last sentence of it is the worst, as you make Luna be in two places at once.
Author's Response: Editing is my weak point.
Date: 12/01/16 08:47 am Title: The Fear
And the idjit water queen is about to destroy her kingdom. She refuses to heed the warnings placed by Luna and Luna's mother and her just desserts will happen. Okay so... with Peter, apparently you can take someone who is unwilling and make them a guardian and a faerie too? That's... pretty terrifying. Either that or the darkness spirit is evil too. Or it knows something we all don't.
Author's Response: Destroy? Nah that wouldn't be evil enough :)
Author's Response: Destroy? Nah that wouldn't be evil enough :)
Date: 11/14/16 07:42 pm Title: The Deep
So it seems that Peter will be the new guardian for the Darkness Fairies, which means that he and Prim will eventually have to fight. Things just seem to be going from bad to worse for Prim...
Author's Response: It'll get better at some point right? Right?
Date: 11/05/16 03:52 am Title: The Controlled
My phone's autocorrect function must have changed Deleka to Selena, sorry about that. Anyway, looks like Prim and Luna are out of the frying pan and into the lagoon. But it seems that Deleka is in a pinch too. I am very curious as to how they will get themselves out of this one. One thing occurs to me though, the water fairies seem very opportunistic which hints at possible weakness. This also leads me to believe that they can be bargained with. Only problem is what do they want and will Prim or Luna be willing part with it.
Author's Response: I was wondering about that :p. The Water Queen has her own reasons for the way she behaves which will be explained soon.
Date: 11/02/16 01:11 pm Title: The Recovery
I'm hoping that Prim is able to return Luna's feelings eventually. I'm also hoping that she decides to remain with the fairies when everything is said and done and her friends are returned to normal. There is no way I could see her leaving Maria even if she entrusted her care to her fairy family. All of that said, I'm a little fearful of what will happen when she meets her friend. I hope they are able to subdue him and undo the brainwashing that Selena has inflicted on him.
Author's Response: I'm tinkering with the ending plan. Who knows how it will shape up.
Date: 10/30/16 05:44 pm Title: The Reunion
So I came to this conclusion last chapter and forgot to post it, but I'm predicting that Theo has/will be captured and, after some coaxing, she will turn to the darkness and join Deleka's crusade. She always seemed a little vengeful after Prim became a fairy and Luna's champion, this just seems like the perfect opportunity for her to betray her kin.
Author's Response: True, but Theo is stubbornly loyal to Luna. It is unlikely she'd ever turn on her. I have a much better plan anyway >:D
Date: 10/29/16 05:51 pm Title: The Hidden
I am all fore fairy tales, this is a particularly gripping read, thank you!
Author's Response: Glad you enjoy it.
Date: 10/18/16 11:43 am Title: The Camping trip
This is not a review for this particular story, but you seem to have removed "Curses, Alchemy and Ancient Technology." I just thought you might be interested in knowing that what I assume to be a pirate posted it under the name of "Witchcraft" on Amazon. The reason I assume it to be a pirate is that the person obviously ran a script to replace characters with Greek and Cyrillic look-alikes in an attempt to defeat plagiarism checks.
Author's Response: It was taken down before I could have a look :( Honestly I find it an odd choice of something to plagiarise, I took that book down because it needed a ton of work done on it but I couldn't find the motivation to do it.
Date: 10/15/16 10:48 pm Title: The Broken Throne
Well well more is revealed. I'm starting to think Deleka was once human too with the way she talks about them. Probably a corporate business shark that somehow ended up a faerie. It makes sense with how power hungry she is.
Author's Response: Nope, she was born a fairy. I shudder to think what she'd be like as a Corporate Shark.
Date: 10/06/16 01:55 am Title: The Place
I love your story.
The scene I liked most was the birth of a fairy in a flower. I wonder how these flowers are born? Perhaps some seeds follows after wilting.
I'm usually a purist of mythical creatures. But very little is known about the fairies, except the fact that many people in England, the respect and fear for their magic. There are gardens and villas in England, which are considered fairy territory and therefore people avoid them (superstition).
There are multiple versions of fairy in the tale, in several books by various authors. One I liked was "Peter Pan in Kensington Gardens" (James Barrie)
Author's Response: I'm trying to draw on some Fairy Mythos for this story although I'm not too experienced with fairy in literature so I'm winging most of the details.
Date: 10/05/16 01:02 pm Title: The Camping trip
One thing I find lack of is how unphased Prim is with being present at a bunch of deaths (including a fairy getting eaten alive! It's ought to be a pretty surreal experience). Although I guess the tone of the story might not allow for her mulling over such, being a Hero-fantasy story instead of an Expanse-like drama/opera feel where Miller goes through a crisis due to having taken a life, despite being a cop who is trained to expect such.
Otherwise, I do love this story and wish I could read it to the end already!
Author's Response: I'll try to write it a little faster :p
Date: 10/04/16 04:31 pm Title: The Place
It seems to me that Deleka may have overplayed her hand at the end there. She made the comment that she wanted to get rid of Siskie herself. How would her followers react if it were pointed out that she might get rid of anyone else she did not like?
Author's Response: It comes back to how much power the Queens have over their subjects. There are some that aren't happy with the way Deleka does things, but know its better to stay silent than try to oppose her.
Date: 09/27/16 04:16 am Title: The Light of the Moon
During the fight, at several points it seems like Prim and Winda's names got mixed up. It was particularly obvious when Prim was tired from using too much wind magic. Migt want to read over that section again.
Author's Response: sorry. It was something I noticed while editing but forgot to fix :s