Date: 04/07/19 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 18 The Shadow Of The Night
Ok so they are going to turn her back into a male because the process is very painfull maybe even deadly without painkillers, I hope I understand that correctly.
Author's Response: Yes, There trying to torture her to get information out of her
Date: 03/07/19 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 17 Kidnapped
Well, that is definitely a cliffhanger!
I think I see Paytyn using Lexi as the mother who will unite the earthlings and Martians (Kahlo?) to fulfill some twisted Ares prophecy.
BTW, I love the science in your stories. Thank you.
Date: 02/25/19 05:46 am Title: Chapter 12 Emergency
Scotty, I need warp speed in three minutes or we're all dead! - Captain Kirk (Star Trek II: The Wrath of Khan)
We're losing our deflector shield! Go strap yourself in, I'm going to make the jump to light speed. -Han Solo (Star Wars)
Lightspeed is too slow, we're going to have to go right to Ludicrous Speed - Dark Helmet (Spaceballs)
Date: 02/25/19 03:22 am Title: Chapter 1 Intro
Shadow of the night? Sounds like a very interesting future for Minneapolis.
I have decited to re-read this story, since it's been a few years that I have read it. So I figured I would comment on each chapter even if I had already commented on a few already before.
Date: 02/23/19 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 17 Kidnapped
Man what a cliffhanger to leave off on, hard to believe its been almost 3 years since first written up. This was the first story on this site that I click so thank you for the wonderful introduction. Cant wait for age 2.
So about the chapter im afraid for lexi I know that torture is coming up but what really scare me shitless is the mention of the blank screen while strap in, that give me brainwash vibs, brainwashing scares me in the sense that the person in question may lose the very thing that makes them well themselves. Heres an example, the day you been born your mother/father had a weak body at the young age of X, they contract a small tumor. With the very few years they have they make it memorable and heartwarming. However with brainwashing that could be taken away, having a loved one forgotten like this breaks my heart. So although this may be rude of me I ask to keep any to a minimum please
Now with Sable I have great sympathy for her, the comment about not wearing shoes struck me with a very hard to describe feeling. You can tell she is sad with how her life is and may have envy the freedom lexi had. However I feel that if anyone was willing to help lexi escape it would be her, I feel that if her spirit was truly broken she wouldn't have bother talking to lexi.
Alright so that wraps it up for me, once again thank you for the great story and I look foward to reading age 2 thank you
Date: 01/22/19 10:24 pm Title: Chapter 15 A Martian Dinner
Sorry to see this coming to an end. I always wondered why they didn't take the ship out of missile range before going into suspended animation. Now I know. My prediction is that Lexi will stay behind on Mars either as a captive or in trade for supplies, and that she will be used for breeding purposes. We'll see...
It also appears the Hummingbird, when repaired, could make a number of trips back and forth to earth, either for supplies or to shuttle the Ares' survivors somewhere else.
I am so glad you are going to continue this in 'Age 2'.
Date: 01/11/19 12:50 am Title: Chapter 14 The Martians Of Ares
Also, I don't understand why the ship(s) didn't move out to a safe orbit beyond the reach of the ground based missiles. Even going to the back side of the Moon would be safer than staying within striking range. And if the Hummingbird can go FTL for long periods, couldn't they use it to shuttle everyone back to earth when it is safe to return?
Author's Response: Hi, Great questions!!! These are just guesses I just thought of. I hope they make since... In the beginning I think they were just trying to figure out where the missiles were so they could destroy them. And they didn't go on the back side of the moon becouse there scientific instruments that they had wouldn't be able to scan the Earth properly since there isn't any daylights to bounce signals off of any more. And the hummingbird is only able to carry a small amount of passengers at a time. That would be a slow back and forth trip
Date: 01/11/19 12:45 am Title: Chapter 14 The Martians Of Ares
It will be sad to see this story end, but I can't wait to find out what happens to Lexi in the next few chapters.
And then the teaser fit Age 2. It should be well worth the wait to start reading that. Thank you for taking the time to create these awesome stories.
Date: 12/07/18 03:45 pm Title: Chapter 11 The Great Escape
They haven't left yet? For 5 hundred years they floated near the earth despite it being so dangerous? That seems extremely unwise...
Author's Response: Hi, The whole idea is that they left for safety then after 500 years the ship's auto pilot brought them back to Earth I know I should have explained it a little better in the store
Date: 01/04/17 06:48 am Title: Chapter 6 Hello My Name is... Part 1
Love this version much better than the original one. Although I wish the chapters were released closer together instead of taking this long. :(
I wonder if Brittany will get another girl her age to play with???
Date: 12/18/16 09:25 pm Title: Chapter 5 Breaking the Rules
I hope he puts a foot down and tries to rebel alil and wears normal clothes after he becomes a she and stuff. Would be interesting. And hopefully him and the girl stay close would be interesting if they got together really piss people off
Date: 10/03/16 01:52 am Title: Chapter 3 Not Out Of Danger Yet
I read your stories, and I like them. but I've noticed, you've rewritten some stories (as age1).
The image of the spaceship, I think better than the current image.
This story reminds me a little of "Rejuve universe" (a universe of stories rejuvenation and gender change thanks to the "rejuvenation matrix" (Extraterrestrial))
You might consider, turn this story into a prequel to the "universe Rejuve"
If you liked these images, I recommend you read the following stories:
Have written many stories in this universe, but some added items like "nano-web" and "nano-net" (which seem absurd or excessive or redundant) have also added new species, besides 4 original (also not please me)
One difference between the comic and the literary version:
el cómic tiene manos robóticas.
En la literatura, no hay manos robóticas. Solamente los grilletes en un taburete (como una mesa de tortura medieval).
Date: 10/02/16 06:10 am Title: Chapter 3 Not Out Of Danger Yet
I remember this story x.x
Are you just redoing it and making it longer. Or I'm just having fuckin deja vu hahaha
Author's Response: lol the other version wasn't getting great reveiws and it really didn't work well to me so i just decided to delete it and start again. this time i'm trying to add more technical stuff and have the addition of a love intrest. Anyways thanks for reading and i hope that you continue reading Age One
Date: 09/25/16 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 2 Evacuation
Yup, you hooked me pre-transformation. Quite the accomplishment.
Author's Response: thank you, I have a ton of ideas for this story that will go into the next two chapters before the transformation. I hope you enjoy them just as much. Olivia