Date: 02/21/18 05:36 pm Title: Part 16
It's been a fun read, Hikaro, thanks. Well done.
Date: 02/20/18 09:58 am Title: Part 16
Wow, can't believe this story is over. Now that it's completed, I have to say that it's quite well done. The character's have awesome, unique personalities, the story is well thought-out and written in a pleasing way. Thanks for writing it! :D
Date: 02/20/18 05:04 am Title: Part 16
You know what? This damn story made me feel bad for some reason. I don't know if it was envy or jealousy or something.of his/her situation. Very few stories have made me feel this way.
Also, poor possessed girls :( And how can the mom be so ok with succubus if she was possessed by one? Do they mention for how long do they stay there? What happens to their lives? :( damn yeah this is fucked up lol
10/10 would feel bad again
Author's Response: Is this a positive or negative review?
Date: 02/19/18 06:29 pm Title: Part 16
OMG OMG OMG *squeals* That's so cute! And sweet! And awwwe she DID separate! I was right the first time yay! I hope Eve finds someone that loves her and she can find a sweet romantic life just like Mikaela has with Terry. (they are MEGA cute together)
Date: 02/19/18 04:06 am Title: Part 15
Wow what an amazing story! I tried to look for your stories since the Dracula one, and you haven't dissapointed.
I just have one question tho, so what happens to the possessed girls? Do they go unconscious completely, or can they feel or see whatever is happening? That sounds super fucked up, but then again they are demons :S
Author's Response: They experience every moment. It IS f***** up, yes.
Date: 02/04/18 07:47 pm Title: Part 15
OMG what just happened? Did Eve separate from Mikaela permanently or something? I'm a bit confused I hope the next chapter makes it more clear. I guess I"m just stupid or something, I don't understand fully what happened.
Author's Response: You'll just have to wait and see, but you WILL get an answer.
Date: 01/29/18 10:27 pm Title: Part 14
Nice one, Hikaro, couple of typos but nothing major. Good funny story.
Date: 09/26/17 05:43 pm Title: Part 12
Oh no, she wanted so badly to escape being a succubus and now her sister is making her life hell. This is not good, and they're going to meet Lilith... that's even worse! I'm so worried... I hope nothing horrible happens to Mikaela, she's been through so much.
Date: 09/25/17 07:17 pm Title: Part 1
I am glad you are back at this one, Hika, I absolutely love it.
Author's Response: It was a bit more talky than I imagined it would be. Peek behind the curtain/what could have been: the chapter was GOING to end with Eve's mother's introduction, but I felt it better to save that for the beginning of the next chapter.
Date: 06/01/17 08:01 pm Title: Part 11
Where's Allie when Mikey and Eve need her?
Author's Response: At school.
Date: 05/19/17 04:06 am Title: Part 1
Since I mentioned it, might as well leave a review here too...
While promising, I had mixed feelings about the early chapters. Despite being transformed into a fetish fantasy character, I felt there were no perks to Mike's transformation at all, unless your fantasy is being a underage and sexually undeveloped guy/girl offering yourself to be raped. Compared to the other story, it felt like it was all effort and consequence for Mike's actions, yet no 'magic' (rewards, perks, etc). I also grew to really dislike Eve, who seemed unconcerned for his predicament, and was content using him for her arguably selfish reasons.
Boy, did that last chapter change a lot of that.
Eve went all the way from plot point to character. Her expressing remorse, showing her feelings and wanting him to know she truly wants him to be happy, was a 180° for me both in term of her character to the story itself (the scene was just really well written, I think). On the other hand, MIke beginning to accept his position, or rather, just 'giving it a try', felt really well after all that buildup of him rejecting himself - and its not like he went all the way in either. Its really no different that any of us trying something new and getting to know ourselves better, I think we can relate to that. Not sure how you did it, buy you did it. Congratz!
So, thoughts for the future? I had originally suggested him becoming a Magical girl hybrid, since that would screw Eve's plants (and be funny, maybe?) but now that they get each other, maybe they can use her powers to help people around, make their town a little bit sexier - if you know what Im talking about) and give him the perks for having all that baggage he has to put up. I also feel, that despite all of those mythical elements being added to the story, none have been developed... so far. Up to you!
Date: 05/06/17 05:39 pm Title: Part 8
Nice comedy of errors, Hika. Kisses.
Author's Response: Thank you. Hugs
Date: 04/22/17 03:24 pm Title: Part 1
Loved this story it's one of my favorites I've ever read on here. The innuendos were really funny. It is really well written. The temptation scenes are written perfectly. The world you created for this story and the plot is really what makes this story so brilliant. You found a gold mine of a world to write your story in to be honest. Just all around it's a brilliant story.
I personally hope Mikaela and Terry finally get together. I also hope Eve never leaves Mikaela's body they seem to be like life long friends whether Mikaela wants to admit to that or not.
I just have one question why is the title called "The Unfortunate Experiences of Mike Cross"? It doesn't seem like Mike finds this as an unfortunate experience it feels more like she easily accepts this fate and doesn't mind it so much except for the almost rape scene which was an unfortunate experience. Also her way of showing her irritation with Eve doesn't seem so much as hatred for Eve, but like irritation you would have with an older sister or somebody you actually cared for.
I hope this story continues, I'm a fan.
Author's Response: To answer your question about the title... It's simply something I decided to name the story after a lot of "I have no idea what to call this" thinking. I tried title after title, couldn't find anything I liked. I couldn't find a movie to pun the title off of like I did with The Curse 2 (It's a Highlander 2: The Quickening pun, in case you're wondering), so in the end I just ended up with what it's become. In private, I don't even refer to it as such, I just call it "Succubus", but for obvious reasons, I couldn't just stick it with that simple title. Even the Doc I write it in is still called "Succubus story" to this day, despite how long I've been writing it.
There will be other "unfortunate experiences", though. I've thought of more than a couple.
The story will continue, don't worry, and thank you for the kind words.
Date: 04/08/17 11:06 pm Title: Part 7
Great stuff all around. I have a question though. How longexactly is Eve stuck inside his body? Mike would have probaply asked about that in this. If she could leave anytime she wants, why not just find a better host?
Author's Response: She CAN leave, but she sees Mike as her way out of being a succubus. He'll be her host until she's finally conquered her urges.
Also, why would I undermine the story by giving Eve a new host? C'mon, it's funnier this way.
Date: 04/08/17 02:59 pm Title: Part 7
Are there such things as lesbian succubi? I think I'd like one as a girlfriend.
Sorry to hear you are experiencing a block. Your dialogues, especially the inner ones, are incredibly funny. I love this story.
All the best with it. xx
Author's Response: I'm getting over it slowly. I managed the majority of that chapter yesterday, and it ended up being the longest chapter of the story so far. I'mma call that progress.