Reviews For Wish granting coin
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Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/13/16 07:36 pm Title: Chapter 5

I love wish storylines,but where do u go from this point?

Author's Response: Well I've seen quite a few takes on the storyline. Either something bad happens and you loose the wishes, the wishes get out of hand and get really redicilus, or they decide they're happy as is with their wishes and get rid of it. BUT I know how I'm ending it. It's soemthing to do with the first chapter and how they got the coin ;) Thanks for the review though!

Reviewer: MaxP Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/03/16 10:37 am Title: Chapter 1

Good lighthearted fun. I love wish stories, this is a good one!

Some minor things - maybe 'divine' instead of 'devine', also there's a switch from first to third person at the end of the first chapter (try 'picked me up' instead of 'picked up Sam' etc).

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm not used to writing past tense and first person so I'm sure that's not the only mistakes in it

Reviewer: AlexiaRose Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 08/28/16 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

Golly I would love to be in this story.

Author's Response: That would be the dream :,) - (why a three??)

Reviewer: cpisballa Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/24/16 04:42 am Title: Chapter 3

Love this story. I can really get into people changing into different types of animals and objects. I'd love to see some more of that. It seems this story may be coming to an end and there may not be many more wishes but I'm really hoping for a lot more! Either way, can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Hey mate! I'm planning for at least ten chapters so there's plenty more for you too look forward to! :D I'm not sure about objects but I'm going to make some interesting animal/human cross related scenes. Thanks for the review

Reviewer: Nfsu218 Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/21/16 04:41 pm Title: Chapter 2

Well, I guess I should have expected some of what occurred in this chapter. I wasn't. It isn't bad but be careful of making this a "What the fuck am I reading" kind of story. Some people can get into those, but I imagine that some will get turned away by it. Either way, just remember to keep to your rule you made of "The coin will not grant two wishes in a row to the same person, there must be a wish made by somebody else between." The scene where Sam made the friends wish on Karla then altered it after would technically be breaking the rule.

Thank you for the chapter!

Author's Response: Hey friend! Thanks so much for the response. This is my first time writing like this and I didn't really spend a lot of time editing it once I was finished. As I guess you could tell by the consistency error (I've just fixed that though). I'm an author and am usually really picky about my writing but as I said I didn't go over it much. If you have any other pointers for this type of writing I'm more than happy to hear what you've got to say :D Regards, SheppardTheElder

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