Date: 01/09/20 08:01 am Title: Chapter 1 Dad agrees to help me in my school project
I really wanted to like this story, but I could hardly make it through the first half of the chapter. You need an editor, I'm willing to help if you want to. A couple of quick notes to start out, first off, the bra size measures the size of the chest and the cup size. A 34C bra would only fit on a 34 inch chest, so it would not fit most men where you say that most men like a 34C - what should be said is that most men want a C cup. Next, when did they take off the boxers before fitting him with the gaff to hide his penis? If they took off the underwear to fit him with that, something should be said about that, you would think he would wake up as they did that. There are many grammatical and punctuation errors as well. I do like the concept of the story and the plot line and characterization seem to be coming along well from what I did read. Let me know if you are interested in an editor for this story, and I would be willing to look at your other stories if you wish. You can reach me at email@example.com
Date: 10/21/19 02:25 am Title: Chapter 6 Dad decides to have a sex change operation done .
Thank you for continuing this great story !! , I want to see how he will feel when his whole body looks like a beautiful teenage girl ... and I also wonder how he will feel when he doesn't have his male member between his legs.