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Reviewer: JD2015 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/14/16 05:30 pm Title: Day 1

It took me some time to adjust to your style of writing and how you described the way Hibiki was taken over by the service station (at the beginning it seemed to be too detached to be exciting), but once I got into the matter, I loved to go on reading. It was a pleasue to follow her plunge into ever naughtier depths.
One of my favorite parts was her surgery, humiliaiting but still so excititng...
And there are many parts of the story I liked just as much!

I can`t understand why you haven`t got more reviews. This is easily one of the more accomplished stories at TG Storytime. Thank you for the good reading experience:(:(:(:

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the kind words! I'm glad you stuck around and came out enjoying the story.

Reviewer: Jinxd Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/12/16 02:05 am Title: Day 1

Great story!

My one very small criticism is that the numbers don't add up in chapter 12. If the initial debt was $100k, on day 101 chapter having $520 as a new best and $49,870 remaining isn't possible. She only worked perhaps 80 days, so to have paid off 50k already she'd be averaging like $625 a day - no way $520 could be a new best. I'm a very special kind of weirdo to notice things like this while reading a story like this.

Anyways nitpick aside, my favorite part was the end of day 25 where she really came into her own and embraced her sexuality.

Author's Response: CRAP. I actually tried to balance things, but I've only taken a look at the complete timespan, and haven't paid enough attention at how much time has passed at every stage/chapter. Thanks for pointing it out :D I'm very happy to hear you enjoyed the story overall and thank you very much for your review!

Reviewer: JoeForest Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/27/16 07:10 pm Title: Day 5

As "Heath" said: Ho. Ly. Fuck. I don't know how you've done it, bamboozlr, but you hit it out of the park with this one - personally, I already like it more than your other stories and shit, they were easily 5 star as well.

It honestly feels like you've woven a tapestry of my personal top fetishes into the beginnings of an amazing story, one which I could not take my eyes off of until I got to the end. Bravo, and keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Oh my :x Praise from you always tastes twice as sweet. I'll try to get the rest of the story up here soon, otherwise there's always the download options, the story's already finished there. I hope the rest of it can continue to impress you :) Thank you very much!

Reviewer: MiMiMi3 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/27/16 06:55 pm Title: Day 1

Really like it so far, but it would be nice if it didn't end with the MC becoming a mindless bimbo. Don't get me wrong, I love the mental and cultural changes, just don't like IQ loss or straight-up identity death.

Author's Response: Don't want to give anything away early on, but I think it won't be as severe as what you have in mind.

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