Reviews For Alexa's beginnings
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Reviewer: Kepli Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/25/17 01:15 am Title: Chapter 3

hurry up with the next chapter. Maybe shr goes and the other girls call her flat.She gets embarassed and later gets implants

Reviewer: Jessica0016 Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/20/16 02:16 am Title: Chapter 2

Great story. Cool thing to add would be swimming since it is a camp also can't wait to see where this story goes

Reviewer: Jessica0016 Signed Report
Date: 08/20/16 02:16 am Title: Chapter 2

Great story. Cool thing to add would be swimming since it is a camp also can't wait to see where this story goes

Reviewer: auroria Signed star Report
Date: 08/15/16 04:34 pm Title: Chapter 1

Agree with previous comment.. Grammer is must.

Also when I read through the first chapter it felt like you were trying to go to fast.. slow down the story a little. Give some background on characters; so that people can relate to them.

Reviewer: PamInPink86 Signed starstar Report
Date: 07/13/16 08:33 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'd start by reading it over and fixing your grammar. It really needs some good editing. The story itself doesn't flow. It's just hard to read and doesn't seem to go anywhere. Then there's detail like the exact phone model and I don't know why you're saying that.
I can tell you've got an idea here and you should go with it. First, re-read and touch up what you have. Keep playing with it until it really flows. And check your grammar carefully.

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