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Reviewer: 930310 Signed Report
Date: 06/20/16 07:55 pm Title: Chapter 1: Why did my dad turn into a baby?

The medical part is inaccurate. There is no such thing as a "XY" or "XX"-chromosome. We inherit one chromosome from each of our parent. We always inherit one "X"-chromosome from our mother and then it is 50/50 whether we will inherit a "Y"-chromosome from our father. Of course, anomalies might happen and we end up with a different amount of chromosomes such as "XXY", "X", "XYY" etc.
Also, theoretical chromosome changes will not affect our bodies to any major extent after we've been born. It is rather the amount of hormones that we are exposed to that will do such.

Also, the story is in need of editing. There are issues with the grammar.

Author's Response: It is a fiction and I don't know something about the medicin, but I only know that they have different chromosomes. I sent the pm to you.

Reviewer: Natasa Jacobs Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/13/16 12:38 pm Title: Chapter 1: Why did my dad turn into a baby?

This is going to be fun reading about Josie, I mean Josephine growing up. I hope its a long story and not a rushed one. I like long stories, it makes it feel very real.

Author's Response: Thanks you! I will write about her.

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