Date: 05/20/16 07:52 am Title: Broken Image
Engaging and coherent! I'd definitely be interested in seeing where you take this, if you plan to!
Author's Response: I am seriously thinking about a much longer rewrite of this short story. Although not sure when I will get to it as work has become mentally exhausting over the past few month and I really need to complete a couple other longer stories that I am currently writing before I take on yet another one.
Date: 05/14/16 07:59 pm Title: Broken Image
As hard it is to discribe this story, I truely love it. Even though the vocabular use is somewhat hard at certain points, it's still possible to read through. However, I did find it really hard to create a film in my mind of all things written, due to the complexity of some parts.
Still, a beautiful story. Not quite what I had exacted, but most certainly enjoyable!
Author's Response: Yes after writing it I truly believe that 4200 words were not enough. Too many things were left out that I now realize that will bug me until I rewrite it into something that I can see now will end up ten times the size.