Reviews For Broken Image
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Reviewer: I_Think Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 05/20/16 07:52 am Title: Broken Image

Engaging and coherent! I'd definitely be interested in seeing where you take this, if you plan to!

Author's Response: I am seriously thinking about a much longer rewrite of this short story. Although not sure when I will get to it as work has become mentally exhausting over the past few month and I really need to complete a couple other longer stories that I am currently writing before I take on yet another one.

Reviewer: DarkLuke Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 05/17/16 09:22 pm Title: Broken Image

Huh. Well that was interesting. I wish it were longer so we could have gotten to know Bob/Bobbi and his/her situation better and maybe relate to him/her more, but this is well written. Keep em coming.

Reviewer: DC1writes Signed Report
Date: 05/16/16 06:45 pm Title: Broken Image

But the story itself was pretty nice. As a wise man ever said (perhaps not man, it was Yoda): "size matters not". And it really doesn't. Even if your story was short, it is still a great story!

Reviewer: Maryjane Signed Report
Date: 05/16/16 06:42 pm Title: Broken Image

Also with mothers letter a broken heart.

Reviewer: DC1writes Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 05/14/16 07:59 pm Title: Broken Image

As hard it is to discribe this story, I truely love it. Even though the vocabular use is somewhat hard at certain points, it's still possible to read through. However, I did find it really hard to create a film in my mind of all things written, due to the complexity of some parts.

Still, a beautiful story. Not quite what I had exacted, but most certainly enjoyable!

Author's Response: Yes after writing it I truly believe that 4200 words were not enough. Too many things were left out that I now realize that will bug me until I rewrite it into something that I can see now will end up ten times the size.

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