Date: 05/09/16 12:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hate to be so blunt, but your writing skills need a lot of work. You repeatedly use incorrect grammer, the chapter is much too short (500 words is the ABSOLUTE minimum) and your characters do not speak like regular humans ("Congratulations, it is a boy. Here is the other one, a girl. Twins. The media will try to talk to you." What doctor speaks like that). Again, sorry to be so blunt. I hope you continue to write and improve your skills
Author's Response: I'm only a teen, so I hope I'll improve every year.