Date: 10/04/17 05:45 pm Title: Bottom's Up!
I enjoyed the plot, fairly straightforward for a short story with a nice twist at the end. The characters that got introduced along the flow of the plot with it's subplots kept the suspense going.
Very speling errors, but came across rephrased sentences where garbled remains of the editing stayed put, I believe three such cases exist. The transition were done with objective in mind and therefor I forgive the lack of plausibility and transitions details, which would definitely drag this short into a full-blown novel, and maybe the purpose would also be voided.
Looking forward to enjoy the other three books in the series.
Date: 04/28/16 04:37 am Title: Bottom's Up!
Wow...just wow, now if only a powder like that actually existed XD though I'd pass on it if it made one super horny, that would just be awkward. The effects are somewhat similar to actual HRT, though the body shape doesn't change quite so much, nor does the voice which for a lot of people requires practice and at times specialised voice training. I can only assume that the job Alan/Claret is in pays pretty darn well since breast enhancement surgery would cost a few thousand on its own. I do feel that I could offer you some constructive criticism though, I didn't notice many spelling and grammatical errors as I have in some other stories, but I did have a little difficulty following the story at times as your paragraphs(if any) are not separated properly which makes things feel a little rushed here and there. The cause may be something other than you the author, but I just felt I should point that out, as I would have two returns between paragraphs to split the piece up a bit so that there would be a full empty line between each paragraph in my own writing.
Author's Response: Thank you for everything. The paragraph thingy is a surprise because I write in Word and use paragraphs but they don't translate on the site. I'll need to change the way I set it up in Word. My idea for this series was to create a fictional compound that wasn't quite real, but not completely sci-fi, so, yeah, some of the effect of "MF100" can't be achieved today. I usually try to be more realistic. I do like writing about situations devoid of real issues (like STDs and, to some degree, financial constraints). You'll generally see that my characters can afford the basics of their new lifestyle. I know it's not always reality but I just love to see these boys become the girls they need to be! Thank you again and I hope you like my others.
Date: 04/20/16 04:40 pm Title: Bottom's Up!
I read in the shoutout section someone 1 stared all your stories. I gave them 5 stars so now they're at 3 stars each I guess, but I think it sucks that you got 1 stared because you didn't deserve it. I for one definitely look forward to your ambitious 4 parallel stories. :)