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Reviewer: Natasa Jacobs Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/04/19 01:47 pm Title: Chapter 2

This chapter is full of crap lol It was good and funny

Reviewer: Natasa Jacobs Signed Report
Date: 03/04/19 01:07 pm Title: Chapter 1

Why is Robin letting them do this to him?

Reviewer: Stephannie Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/11/14 03:32 pm Title: Chapter 2

I loved reading your story and hope that you will continue to write more. I can't wait to read it.

Reviewer: 1991marky Signed half-star Report
Date: 09/11/12 06:04 am Title: Chapter 2

I really didn't care for this story there wasn't enough pictures and no school is allowed to do the things that this school did so I'm sorry

Reviewer: Snarfles Signed Report
Date: 06/19/12 04:08 am Title: Chapter 2

Proofread your work more thoroughly. Using erroneous words, spellings, and syntax detract from the story. Dialog needs to be separated according to speaker to avoid tasking your readers with needing to sort it out themselves, and to clarify if the dialog content is spoken aloud, is an aside to the reader, or internal commentary. Robin seems way too co-operative with the whole transformation process. And finally, over the past several decades, petticoat discipline has been removed from main-stream education, particularly from parochial schools.

Snarfles wants you to keep writing, have fun with it; but you need to make it just as fun to read as it is to write.

Reviewer: Baby_Girl_69ing Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 05/19/12 01:14 am Title: Chapter 1

Very fun story thanks for sharing i enjoyed your story very much.

thanks

Reviewer: Hikaro Signed starstarstarhalf-star Report
Date: 01/15/12 08:28 pm Title: Chapter 1

It seemed interesting, but the bold puts me off a little and at about half to two-thirds of the way down the page, you lost your paragraphing.

It had a good start, though.

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