Date: 05/23/17 04:34 am Title: Chapter 5 Officially a unofficial Girl
There is absolutely no logic thinking at all in this chapter. If his mother forced him into wearing a purple pair of pajamas, in what way does this mean that he isn't boyish?? The real antagonist so far is clearly the mother.
Date: 05/23/17 04:22 am Title: Chapter 3 Waking up a Girl
The mother is so full of crap that it's ridiculous. First she says to her child that, even though his body might have changed, his true friends will still see him for who she is only to then force him to not be who she is by changing his name and force him into female clothing.
Had a single person in this hospital been realistic, they would have allowed him to dress exactly how he wants and keep his name.
Additionally, there really isn't much physical difference between boys and girls that haven't started puberty yet, so all this seems completely unnecessary. Cut his hair and give him clothes that fit, problem solved. Once he enters puberty, just give him testosterone and estrogen/progesterone-blockers.
Date: 04/29/17 03:20 am Title: Chapter 16 Alex's Birthday
Good story. There were alot of rough spots grammatically and I also found the idea of a 12 year old dating to be a bit off, at that age they can hardly have a true romantic relationship... overall ot was decent
Date: 05/06/16 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 16 Alex's Birthday
I hope there is a sequel planned...Alex and Bethany growing up as boy/girl friend. And who knows later in life Alex and Bethany as parents...(ok, I'm a romantic)
Author's Response: Yes I do plan to continue on with Bethany's story but first I have two others to go threw...
Date: 05/05/16 01:46 am Title: Chapter 16 Alex's Birthday
The story was cute, and very well told. No complaints. It was an enjoyable read. As I have no idea if you ever intend to do anything professional with the story at a later date, it's probably inappropriate to mention that if you ever did, this thing requires a very good proof reading. When I first inputed Angie's Revenge, I transcribed it straight from my hard copy printout right to the "Posting" site on TG Storytime, with only a then android tablet and no known way to "save" stuff. Had to do it straight to the site, and that meant that my early uploads to TG Storytime were equally riddled with bad spellings and missing words. So I can't complain about the fact that this story as a submitted manuscript is not exactly in perfect shape. But I was easily able to mentally
"search and replace" in my head your "errors" for what they were meant to be. All in all an enjoyable story. Thanks for posting it.
Date: 04/30/16 12:53 am Title: Chapter 15 Sleep Over Part 2
While i haven't been reviewing this story i have been reading as they have come out. Sad that it will be the end of this point of view starting with the last chapter but i guess its great the story is continuing.
Author's Response: Thank you and I promise you your going to love the next chapter!
Date: 04/19/16 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 11 Biggest Question Yet
Good cliffhanger. Bethany needs just a couple more reasons to like being a girl and a way to get over the bullying that is still going on at school. Maybe everyone will forget about her at some point. I imagine that there will be some intense feelings when they find out that Bethany will never be able to change back to Nathan.
Date: 04/17/16 12:59 am Title: Chapter 1 The Class Bully
I forgot I'm surprise that schools staff did not tell students the what and who did this to Bethany , I would think the her fellow students would have some compassion, as this could happened to them and how they would be treated , if they where in her shoes. Kids can be most cruel as I can tell you.
Author's Response: I think that the lab in there town is well known enough that if they say something like Nathan is now Bethany then people will automatically think about the lab doing it... And kids don't need a reason to pick on you they just do
Date: 04/17/16 12:52 am Title: Chapter 1 The Class Bully
Date: 04/16/16 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1 The Class Bully
Chapter 8 New Life Old School Part 1
"I have to say Mrs. White is on to something here I remember a teacher, did a homework assignment along those lines and some of the kids response where not very nice .
But I have to say if your a** is in jail or your being acurse of something very serous you will find out who your friends are in very short order .
I once stud up for a fireman accuse of killing a little in the late 60s in Foster City and I took a lot heat on the matter later he was exonerated.
Date: 04/16/16 02:11 am Title: Chapter 1 The Class Bully
I love how this story is coming along so far in chapter 8 but I forgot to ask in my last review.
what is going to happen to Jamie's henchman or should I say hench boys because they are just as guilty Jamie is
Author's Response: Jail probably
Date: 04/15/16 01:11 am Title: Chapter 7 Plays Like a Girl
Excellent act of justice upon Tyler. It's nice that Bethany isn't feeling bullied by his mother and that she actually was thinking of his future happiness. Bethany just had to know that.
Author's Response: Exactly
Date: 04/13/16 03:51 pm Title: Chapter 1 The Class Bully
Nathan was bullied by a bunch of boys at school.
You do realize that everything Rebecca is doing to her new daughter is nothing more than bullying also? Rebecca needs to think this through before Bethany has a breakdown.
Date: 04/13/16 03:18 pm Title: Chapter 6 Girls Day out
Funny chapter. There was a part of this chapter that reminded me of another story I read. Not sure which story. But it was when she looked at the dress and another girl said she wanted it and then Bethany took it instead. Wish I remember which story it was.
Date: 04/13/16 04:25 am Title: Chapter 1 The Class Bully
Nice story, I hope the punks that did this to him get what they deserved. Like giving them the same Drug, because the normal laws and there punishment would not apply in such a case. Because what was taken here can not be restored and locking them up would not began to pay for what they did.
Author's Response: You know I do agree with you and maybe that's how I'll interdused Mrs. Walker's back story
Date: 04/12/16 09:14 pm Title: Chapter 5 Officially a unofficial Girl
that was funny. Bethany is brave. I knew these two little girls that liked to be naked a lot. We were all in 2nd grade at the time. It didn't get to me that it was wrong. They were little and innocent and so was I. They were the bravest girls I ever knew. Sometimes I wonder what they are doing today.
Alex seems to be such a nice best friend. Maybe he would be her girlfriend. Thanks to this chapter, I am niw in the mood for pizza. :P
Date: 04/12/16 12:24 pm Title: Chapter 4 planning
This is a great story and hoping a bit sentimental and a bit funny.
I honestly wait to read more and even intrigued on what that other doctor has in store.
Author's Response: Thanks actually the next chapter is coming out in just a few hours (12:00 central time zone)