Date: 02/22/18 03:41 am Title: Part 1
Great middle point for the final book. I'm rereading these now and thought you deserved a review. there are a few grammatical errors here and there, but this is still a solidly good read.
Author's Response: I am glad you're enjoying the read and commenting! Thank you for taking the time. So long and thanks for all the fish.
Date: 02/22/18 03:40 am Title: Part 1
I really like what you wrote here. I'm not sure if you're even around anymore. One thing you have or had to work on was your use of the term wary vs weary. I keep thinking you meant to say wearilly in a lot of places in this story and the first. It needed/needs polishing in places, but still is an engaging read.
Author's Response: Thank you. I am still around, I have my own website, danielawolfe.com. I've begun to serialize my latest works in their raw (mostly) unedited form form on the website then repost to fictionmania, tgstorytime and bigcloset topshelf once they are complete and edited. Some errors I have trouble catching as I tend to see what I meant to write versus what the text actually says. Give enough time I do see more mistakes crop up. Perhaps, some day given enough time I'll go through and fix all the issues. Have a delightfully demented day, Daniel A. Wolfe (D.A.W.)
Date: 11/20/12 01:33 am Title: Part 1
'"Because of Ragnarok?" I asked.' I think you mean for the I here to be Derek, but I'm not sure.
Definitely a middle chapter, but it provides a lot of interesting setup and is of course fantastically written.
Were you to ever revisit the entire series as a whole I'd suggest setting up some of the organizations in the first chapter just as background, so it doesn't feel like the focus turns just a bit in this chapter.
Author's Response: It was supposed to be Derek that said that. That particular error has been rectified thanks for pointing it out.