Date: 05/09/16 02:43 pm Title: Chapter 10: dance and party prep
Enough with the kid stuff! This story made less and less sense as the story went on - the worst was the one where her friend rescues her - it was just babble. There is a kernel of a good idea here but as your coherence degenerates so too does my interest. Sorry to be so harsh , I'd urge you to continue trying - only through effort will you become a good story teller.
Author's Response: Hey I'll take harshness over someone, what's the word I'm looking for? Anyways you get the idea. The reason I had a whole "adventures of mini Elsa" thing was because the trip is the last part, and I wanted to get in a juicy story for my readers, because personally I don't like a good story that's too short.
Date: 03/29/16 07:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is a great and intresting story keel up the work cause I'm intrest into finding out what happened next
Author's Response: Working on that detail, I've got a lot of ideas for it, but to be honest: I've never actually seen Frozen, so, I've got some digging to do.