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Reviewer: Tahiri Veila Signed starstar Report
Date: 05/22/16 02:51 pm Title: Chapter 12: the trip

seems incomplete though initially good is there going tobe more.

Author's Response: I'm considering it, but, I'm a little low on ideas right now.

Reviewer: Kirito Signed Report
Date: 05/12/16 02:22 pm Title: Chapter 1

Look the whole kid talk thing is fine but only use it when mini elsa is talking and not in the descriptions it doesn't fit one bit

Reviewer: Greatsage Signed Report
Date: 05/09/16 02:43 pm Title: Chapter 10: dance and party prep

Enough with the kid stuff! This story made less and less sense as the story went on - the worst was the one where her friend rescues her - it was just babble. There is a kernel of a good idea here but as your coherence degenerates so too does my interest. Sorry to be so harsh , I'd urge you to continue trying - only through effort will you become a good story teller.

Author's Response: Hey I'll take harshness over someone, what's the word I'm looking for? Anyways you get the idea. The reason I had a whole "adventures of mini Elsa" thing was because the trip is the last part, and I wanted to get in a juicy story for my readers, because personally I don't like a good story that's too short.

Reviewer: Darkseide Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 04/01/16 07:13 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'm thinking Elsa is somewhat enjoying this

Author's Response: She might be

Reviewer: Jessieca250 Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/29/16 07:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is a great and intresting story keel up the work cause I'm intrest into finding out what happened next

Author's Response: Working on that detail, I've got a lot of ideas for it, but to be honest: I've never actually seen Frozen, so, I've got some digging to do.

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