Date: 03/25/16 06:54 am Title: Chapter 1
Well, that was good. I enjoyed it! Good message too, but if Caleb asked to be a woman, surely Caleb wouldn't had been born at all, so his mother couldn't have brought all that. Good story though.
Author's Response: There was a brief line where Caleb/Hayley says that she wasn't sure if what she was worried about even mattered in this timeline. When I envisioned this story initially, I really wanted to have the moral come in the form of being with Caleb's mom. If we're going off of rules established by other parallel universe fiction, then yes, Caleb wouldn't have existed. But I wanted Hayley to come to the realization that every action affects somebody else, and having it affect Caleb's mom was fitting to me. I like to think that Caleb was simply gone by the time she got back from her trip, not that she never had a son. That way, Hayley's redemption would be more satisfying. Thank you for the review. While writing it, I just thought that the moral was more important than sticking to the rules.
Date: 03/25/16 02:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Hey, that was pretty good! I didn't realize where it was going at first but i liked it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. One thing I think I need to work on, even in my non-TG writing, is pacing. While re-reading it, I was afraid that there was too drastic of a tonal shift, going from erotica, basically, to a Hallmark movie by the last third. But I kept it in as Caleb/Hayley realized what was really important. Going from focusing on sex to focusing on service towards others. I hope it came across more as natural than directionless. But thank you for the review!