Date: 03/17/18 10:28 pm Title: Chapter 10: Doctor's Appointment and Lunch at Ivar's
Sorry about this as Im not sure about how things work, but if she wasnt physically or sexually attracted to anyone before her transformation then if she is now attracted to men, shouldnt it be catagorized as "becomes only attracted to men" or both? I kinda started reading because I saw the doesnt change label. But then again my fault for not having considered when she was a male she could have just as easily been into guys then.
Author's Response: That is a fair point and I probably should change it, but I also intend to write a sequel where I will explore who Elizabeth is attracted to along with other things.
Date: 02/02/18 06:28 pm Title: Chapter 22: Cleanup and looking to the future
Wow, you're one good writer. There are many stories flooding the place but only some could be considered pearls and this one's a pearl. I don't like Magic stories but yours 'spell-bound' me. Keep up the good work and I'll be waiting for your new projects.
Date: 01/14/18 01:32 pm Title: Chapter 22: Cleanup and looking to the future
Nicely done. I am not all that into magical changes myself, but this really held my attention all through.
Author's Response: Well, I'm glad that you finally found a magical gender change story that you liked.
Date: 01/14/18 11:01 am Title: Chapter 22: Cleanup and looking to the future
God I've missed this story. Happy for the updates :3
Author's Response: Now that the first story is done, all you have to do is wait for its sequel; however I have another project that will come first. :)
Date: 03/03/17 04:26 am Title: Chapter 11: At Alderwood and a new Ally
Maybe she can figure out a way to remove her dads curse.... and as to a couple chapters back when he got jealous and depressed from the things women can do and things of that nature I go threw the same issue :/ so I know how that is
Date: 08/23/16 01:49 pm Title: Chapter 10: Doctor's Appointment and Lunch at Ivar's
This is one of my favourite stories on here but I think you should add some more chapters soon :)
Author's Response: Oh dear the only way I'll type as fast a professional writer is by working with dictation software, but I'll try not to be tooslow ;)
Date: 07/17/16 04:46 am Title: Chapter 8: Dad's past and Daniel's future
I'm really liking how this story is progressing. It seems it's the rare tg tf story that tells the story of a person experiencing gender dysphoria. I'm eager to see more!
Author's Response: Thank you. Yes Daniel indeed has Gender Dysphoria.
Date: 07/15/16 07:51 am Title: Chapter 1: Meeting Daniel
This is a great story! Obviously there is room for improvement like the others have said, but there are also so many things I think you've done well. My favorite is the scene where Daniel and her father share the 'Soul Vision', when she realized her true self it honestly made me tear up a bit, even though it's a cliche thing I think you did it very well. Keep it up! ;)
Author's Response: Thank you
Date: 05/19/16 06:44 am Title: Chapter 6: Explanations
Really digging this one so far. I love the fantasy elements, and the use of a familiar city setting. My only critiques would be, and they are quite minor:
A couple of times, the flow of the story gets broken by using "then" where it should be "than" ("I would rather eat ice cream than be eaten by wolves." Using "then" in this sentence would change it from preference of one activity over the other to preferring to do one before the other. I do not like to be eaten by wolves regardless of how much ice cream I'll get before hand.)
And Daniel has worked at both Burger King and Burger World. You should be okay to use Burger King here, and have it considered fair use, and doing so consistently will add to the already well executed ties to reality (plus, it'll help me to continue holding on to the idea that my staff will be along to fix me, soon! =) )
Author's Response: thanks, I just didn't want Burger King coming after me for copy rights.
Date: 04/16/16 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 1: Meeting Daniel
It's a nice story so far, well-written and very descriptive. I think the character has a bit of room for development though and some flexing out, but otherwise it's a really good start so far. :)
Author's Response: thanks