An interesting start, but this chapter is way too short... Need to be at least 1K words or more....Visit me on DeviantArt.com and I can help you...👍
A decent start, I suppose. There needs to be more for anyone to make a solid judgement on it... keep it up! :)
Well, there's not much to review, since you've really only written a paragraph. However, there is potential and it would be nice to see more.