Date: 05/12/16 07:52 am Title: The Great War
Welp, this is one late review, but I hope you're still reading this. I found this story quite interesting and honestly, pretty good. There were a couple of spelling mistakes but nothing that couldn't be read. Even though this review is 3 months after the last update, I'm kind of hoping for this story to not die and continue.
Date: 02/11/16 12:23 am Title: Punishments
Great story. It's interesting how you write. It seems that you rush the typing. The story is slightly rushed, but now terribly so. I hope to see more! :D
Author's Response: TBH wrote 95% of it in one sitting until 4:30 in the morning, when I was really drunk, after my girlfriend broke up with me, a year ago. just decided to post it now.
Date: 02/10/16 03:43 am Title: The Great War
You make a lot of grammar errors, also the ending to chapter 5 came completely out of nowhere and left a really bad taste. You shouldn't make a that abrupt tone shift, from romance to gender bender rape.
Aside from that, your story has potential. The characters are well established, and the romance is believable.
Story is not bad but not good either. Keep practicing.
Author's Response: Been altering the crap out of it, didn't think anyone would even read it :-P
Date: 02/09/16 05:00 pm Title: The Great War
The plot is solid, but the titanic amount of grammatical, spelling, and general compositional errors make the story nigh-unreadable.
Author's Response: Thanks, I've been proof reading it and ya holy crap. :-P Think I got a bunch of um but it still needs some work.