Date: 07/18/17 07:51 pm Title: Chapter 12
I've really enjoyed the slow, forced/self-inflicted changes going in in this story. Nice job. I've also enjoyed the mystery elements and the story itself. The reason I givd 4 stars instead of five is that I felt the emotional coflicf in chapter 12 seemed too jagged. All the conflicted feelings/reactions were believable and relatable considering the circumstances, but it seemed like all Aaron did was look at their dick and then erupt in rage. You included a paragrpah od internal thought there, which worked I think I wanted more if that. Similarly Baylee's reaction felt like it happened too fast for me. I liked the idea as well of Aaron returning for their phone but collapsing into Baylee's arms. Maybe it would have contrasted more if the original anger had had a longer build up? Anyways, loving this story, please keep writing it.
Date: 03/07/16 10:51 am Title: Chapter 7
Oh no not again. Just when he was about to start working. This will sure attract everyone on that floor to him as he scream in pain. And why dont he take a sick leave, see a doctor and make police report or something. Keep it coming please. At this moment I can only guess next is agony and those colleague of his find out what is happening to him. I can only guess though. :)
Date: 02/09/16 02:12 pm Title: Chapter 5
I'm really getting into this story! And don't worry about the shorter chapter, I think it is good to have short ones occasionally. It was a good place to leave off at, now we have the suspense of are these new injections going to change him further?
Date: 02/09/16 03:00 am Title: Chapter 5
Well, this story is lookign to be very interesting. I can't wait to see where all you take this. I can't help but think the mystery men are trying to remove Aaron's claim on his code by changing him into a completely "different" person thus making it impossible to lay claim on it.
Thank you for writing this story!
Date: 02/05/16 01:06 am Title: Chapter 4
I could only say "more pleaae". Things are still at mystery level here on why 'they' did what they did to Aaron. But I wont be surprise if we will never find out why. I am more concern of what happen to Aaron body and how he will cope up with it. Keep it going k. I am liking it.