Date: 01/19/16 02:19 pm Title: Chapter 1 - the turning of the screw
Well, it's short. Focus on at least 500 words. Proofread it. "Single and unmarried." Doesn't work well together. Single is just fine. There are also various other mistakes. I suggest reading books to increase your vocabulary and understanding of sentences. Otherwise, it's an okay concept and has potential.
Author's Response: thanks man, it was just a sample i wrote to see what people think. Also english is not my native language so mistakes might appear. but thanks for productive criticism