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Reviewer: jacob_wishes_to_be_a_girl Signed Report
Date: 01/19/16 03:31 pm Title: Chapter 1 - the turning of the screw

I agree with Selvanious, but 500-700 words are okay. If you aren't a real teacher, can't you write slower?

Reviewer: Selvanius Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 01/19/16 02:19 pm Title: Chapter 1 - the turning of the screw

Well, it's short. Focus on at least 500 words. Proofread it. "Single and unmarried." Doesn't work well together. Single is just fine. There are also various other mistakes. I suggest reading books to increase your vocabulary and understanding of sentences. Otherwise, it's an okay concept and has potential.

Author's Response: thanks man, it was just a sample i wrote to see what people think. Also english is not my native language so mistakes might appear. but thanks for productive criticism

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