Date: 08/22/16 03:31 am Title: Chapter 6: rumble by the jungle
Besides some spelling. I loved it :)
Would have been cool if she broke the boarder that binds there powers xD to where she cool use hers. Be funny
I'm just imagining the shock on everyone's face. So father daughter time. Hmmmm
Author's Response: Thank you for the review and I appreciate the criticism :)
Date: 07/24/16 07:11 pm Title: At the wrong place at the wrong time
Oh and quite isn't a bad thing
It was all new and it all happened very fast she didn't know what to do so her being quite was basically what I would have done at 1st I this had happened to me. And then the lodness and ass kicking would come in xD lol
And I lime how mom sent her girly clothes and she decided on more normal. I like that a lot. And I liked how you explained her confusion on female hygiene :)
Other then that I loved the chapter :3
Can't wait for more. Hope she kicks cleos ass and comes to figure out more of her capabilities c:
I love her shyness to it's so adorable
Adorableness is a weakness of mine hahahaha
Author's Response: Thank you so much and this amazing review. I tried to emphasis the fact that Azura is no longer a guy and how different it is to be a girl. However I still have a long way to go. The time it took me to make the chapter seemed much longer and I posted it based on that but I read over it afterwards and I need to slow it down. Thank you so much for the support much appreciated
Date: 04/20/16 03:35 am Title: Chapter 2: somethings different
Can't wait for more :O
Loved it. But she went to willingly Dx
._. Was suppose to kick ass or be dragged away. Or something. To willing. In my opinion but I loved it :D
Author's Response: I will be sure to give her personality more of a flare next time. Thank you
Date: 12/24/15 09:08 am Title: At the wrong place at the wrong time
Grammar is fine, easy to understand unlike the title. You wrote a fine piece of literature and just slapped it on. Nice going, pal. You won my curiosity and I'm thankful for that.
The storyline is very intriguing. You described things well and got me hooked right into the good stuff with only the begining. There is not much to say, I've been wanting to read something like this for a long while. A mix of action and TG, I love it good.
Story pace, first it was starting nice and slow yet somehow became fast and rushed towards the end. I don't get it.
Author's Response: Thnx. I noticed it to and now I know that I must watch my pace. Thnx for the feed back