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Reviewer: Amanda R Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/06/19 01:53 pm Title: Positive Discrimination

This really could be a little series if you wanted it to. Different people coming in and getting changed, different companies, government stuff, whatever. Could be a lot of fun. Really enjoy that you avoided stereotypes.

Reviewer: DarkLuke Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 05/19/16 06:27 am Title: Positive Discrimination

Very G. This is probably one of the most well written stories that I've read on this site. It defitinely does play on our modern fears of political correctness and forced diversity in a very fun, supernatural way. Kudos.

Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/05/16 11:11 pm Title: Positive Discrimination

Wow. I really liked this story, and I also disliked this story. Not that it was bad, it was very well written. I dislike stories that take an "innocent" and forced them through a change that they did not want. Thats what i didnt like about this story. Forcing a poor guy to change genders against his will. Its just wrong and can ruin story for me, but in this case it wasn't totally bad.

I think it would have worked much better for me if the guy was shown at the start to be some sexist pig and then this got forced on him, then he ended up as a bimbo receptionist. But that story has been written so many times. yawn.

In this case the guy has some subconscious control about who he becomes and creates the woman he becomes. I really like this part and how that ghost her came in and took his place. I thought that was a very powerful image that helped me picture what was happening which was great. I like the part about the HR person asking questions to direct thoughts and creating the new memories.

I really dislike when an innocent person is erased or trapped in a body with no control. That is really just horrible. In this case though you allowed a slower transition, and in some ways more voluntary. In the end, sam and his memories arent completely wiped away, but kinda just fades into irrelevance as Zara takes over. It isnt like a new personality taking over, but Sam's personality slowly becoming Zara's and not being too upset about the change. But also not being a totally different person as well which I thought was nice. Sharing some similar interests.

I liked the touch about adoption with the parents. I thought it just added some humanity to the character which I really liked.

It was really short, but I think it worked. You could have written a lot more, but I think this way it still worked fine.

Thank-you for writing this story. Please continue to do so.

Reviewer: MageJackie Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/27/16 08:16 pm Title: Positive Discrimination

I really enjoyed this story! I agree with Casey, I wish you stretched it out more, but great job. The only thing that would make this story better is if it had images.

Reviewer: Portia Bennett Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/26/15 01:23 pm Title: Positive Discrimination

At least she had a bit of a choice. I need to talk to these people.

Reviewer: Casey Thompson Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 11/24/15 09:26 am Title: Positive Discrimination

Really nice idea. Wish you would have stretched it out more, but still a good story.

Reviewer: TmC Signed Report
Date: 11/24/15 03:21 am Title: Positive Discrimination

I enjoyed that. Thank you.

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