Date: 02/21/18 04:19 am Title: Part 1
This story needs an editor. It's told very well. I was very interested. Some of the scenes were a bit too much for me to read. *laugh*
I like the setting, I like the characters. I like that it involves magic, and I like that it has Goddesses/Gods, etc. It's super well considered.
What it could have used beyond that, would be a glossary at the foot of each chapter, indicating the pronunciation of the terms used. I'm aware (was made aware) that you created a glossary, separately, and I do appreciate that, but I don't feel like the reader should be forced to seek out another book after the fact (because it will only be after binge reading that they would normally seek it out, or do websearching). I struggled with a few of the words and it made me pause before continuing.
Conclusion: This was definitely binge worthy. I thought the main character was both stubborn at odd points, and accepted things pretty quickly at others, but the gender change was interesting being a gradual and rather painful one. I would have had the character in soaking sweats after the degree of pain they endured (or seemed to endure) and finally, when it comes to the smelly creatures (I couldn't possibly remember the name of them *laugh*) I might have indicated a certain amount of nausea expressed by the people in the vehicle. If I had smelled the scent you had described, I know I would probably have emptied my stomach on the spot.
5 out of 5, this story deserves many more reviews than it seems to have gotten!
Author's Response: Thank you I'm glad you've enjoyed it. I am aware that there are some errors in some of my stories, I fix them whenever i become aware of them. I do have other folks take a look at them, but I've come to expect that they will miss things as they are not professional editors. Believe it or not a lot of folks hated the long drawn out transformations featured in these stories. As far as the glossary is concerned, I decided to post it as a separate document based on input from readers. I originally posted Incompatible without a glossary, but received so many requests that I eventually relented and created one.
Date: 02/21/18 04:12 am Title: Part 1
I loved it, I keep coming back to these after years. Only a few stories make me come back, but knowing what happens afterwards is always amazing. I'll have to read some of your new stuff soon :3
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad it's brought you so much enjoyment over the years. Have a delightfully demented day, Daniel A. Wolfe
Date: 08/30/13 02:34 pm Title: Part 4
I like the plot, and the background is quite deep.
They are some typing mistakes but overall it is quite well written.
Interesting is the matriarchal background given the fact it is no very comon nowadays in western countries. And Merlin and Aurelianus are foes ? Quite the upside down situation.
I really apreciate the "Die Hard" reference in Aryanna controlled dream.
I'll read the sequels with envy.
Date: 11/20/12 12:38 am Title: Part 1
I am not overly fond of the five-year time jump at the end of the story — everything being set up seemed highly urgent, and it seemed as if there should have been more events of significance or duress in that time period that would have been important and interesting to learn about.
Other than that, I like it a lot! Great universe, well-told.
Date: 09/14/11 02:03 am Title: Part 4
Good stuff, I like how you built it around Norse mythology, gave it a nice sense of verisimilitude.
One note though, people were often described as being irritated or angry which was a little off-putting.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm afraid I don't quite understand what you mean. Are you saying that there was too much negativity in the story?