Date: 11/24/15 02:42 am Title: Chapter 1
I agree with hikaro. The most pleasure I get out of stories like this is the build and emotional struggle that the main character feels. The story has a great concept, it just lacks a little in emotional depth. It's still a good read and I did enjoy it.
Date: 10/28/15 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was quite the interesting story. Looking back at the beginning, nobody probably would have noticed if Paul left before the first session started.
Either way, the story didn't progress that way, and the unfortunate thing is that it progressed too quickly. It could have used several more chapters to slowly build Paul's mental transformation to Paulie, but as it stands, we've basically got Paul for one and a half chapters, then Paulie the rest of the way through.
It was nice to see Paulie end up with friends and a lover, but once again, these things move at too quick a pace. The three women show up, suddenly they're Paulie's friends. The guy shows up, suddenly he's Paulie's boyfriend. The story is great, but it reads like things have been ripped out.
This story is worth these four stars. Maybe go back and extend it, and it will be worth that one last star.