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Reviewer: oneanonly_kittykat Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/08/18 08:28 pm Title: Chapter 2

Omg, I so love this story

Reviewer: Stephe2006 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/29/18 12:31 am Title: Chapter 1

Great story and an interesting ending explaining the title.

Reviewer: ElizahAT Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/04/16 03:02 am Title: Chapter 2

This is interesting. It end up so suddenly in my opinion. I still like it though.

Reviewer: Johanna Bender Signed Report
Date: 01/25/16 10:31 pm Title: Chapter 1

I enjoyed the story and think you are well above the average writer on this website. As another reviewer mentioned, the story seemed too rushed and I would have liked to see a longer adjustment period during which he fought his new life. He seemed to complacent, but then tries to rebel much later. I would have thought that he would become more complacent with time, rather than less. Also, in several places you use in to, instead of into. That could be an English custom, so ignore my comment if so. On balance a fine job for a too short story.

Author's Response: What can I say? Slicing prepositions is my biggest kink ;) Yeah, I really do wish I could fill out my stories. I just get so excited by the sexual parts though. Frankly it's a miracle that there's any plot.

Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed Report
Date: 01/25/16 12:47 am Title: Chapter 2

thats a lot of names beginning with C... the A and B series not work out so well?

what was it? insanity? rebellion? ;P

Reviewer: Yuki Tyler Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/24/16 05:21 am Title: Chapter 2

I was really happy to see this story pop back up. I remember reading the original chapter a few months go and finding myself rather intrigued at the concept and now that it's finished I like where it ended. If I had to give a critique I would just say that it ended up being very rushed. There was a wealth of great moments and situations that felt glazed over for the sake of getting to the conclusion. Enjoyable story to be sure, but never be afraid to take time and flesh out the world.

Best Wishes,

Reviewer: liltiger Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/24/16 03:52 am Title: Chapter 2

Whoa did not expect that ending! Good story!

Reviewer: JNGames Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/27/15 10:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

lovely. I like how to the point it is as well as the fact that he carelessly just needs another assistant. sexy.

Reviewer: Sanro Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/27/15 09:29 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow very awesome story so far waiting to read more

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